Open Poetry #8 |
My Wings had not Rusted |
Martie
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My Wings had not Rusted Remember oh memory how you once held me and I curved with you into a backdrop of running water you touched my cheek like a delicate blue egg and indeed I felt like a bird soft and fragile with waiting the soft tick of time fell sweet moments around me and the grass purred with sound casting the delusion of abandon I took your lasting fingers and let them break my innocence and though I was struck I fancied the dance of delusion where could I have gone to tower when I was so blinded and my infant held me captured by bewildering need so I danced such circles watered my bucket to full again and again as it seeped precious days thinking I could not get out but you had not imprisoned me for the house was cards and the wind was blowing and when it fell I was surrounded by fragments of sharp pieces of pretense and finally felt the pain of you but I was free and my wings had not rusted |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
good message here, Martie... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Denise
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Yes, yes, very good, Martie! You've done it once again! Denise |
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ma miller Senior Member
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the soft tick of time fell sweet moments around me and the grass purred with sound casting the delusion of abandon wonderful imagery, Martie ... nice work |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ I wish you could be here to hear me read your poetry ... I read it I enhale it It fills me and still I continue to feast ... 'so I danced such circles watered my bucket to full again and again as it seeped precious days' There you go ... those charismatic circles again ! Flying 'round and 'round and 'round ... ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Martie
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Thank you Sunshine I'm glad you liked it Denise MA--Thanks for letting me know you liked the imagery Marge--I wish I could be there to hear you too...thank you! |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
What a way you have with words also! This is such an incredible piece of work. Sincerely, Sauni Sauni :) |
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Kit McCallum
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Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Stunning imagery Martie! This was absolutely wonderful, and held such a poignant message. Beautifully penned! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
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Remember oh memory how you once held me and I curved with you into a backdrop of running water Oh Martie.....sighhhhhh!!!! Absolutely beautiful!! |
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BSC
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Posts 2919New York, USA |
So very beautiful, and full of wonderful imagery. Bonnie |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I love the images that I get when I read one of your poems...I have realized that I read them slowly so as to enjoy what they breathe. This one is a true treasure and I thank you once again for blessing us. |
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Martie
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Sauni--thank you for such a lovely compliment Kit--You always say such wonderful things in your replies...thank you for that. Dark Angel--thanks for the sighhhhhh Bonnie--So glad you liked it...thanks for all the readings and your sweet replies. Mark--thank you for the thoughtful reply and for slowly... |
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