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Rose Petal Sheets"--Newest entry into the joust
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Rose Petal Sheets"--Newest entry into the joust |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA 
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In my dreams is where she stands In hopefully not so distant a land Oh my how I long to take her hand And just gaze into her eyes as long as I can In my dreams is where I dare To linger and steal a kiss from such a fare Maiden, one who wipes away all my fears and cares So that all I see is she, and my heart lays bare In my dreams is where she flies The wind in her face, as she soars high The warmth of the sun, radiance in the sky My beautiful floating butterfly & In my dreams is where I lay her down On Rose petal sheets without a frown & In her love and in her trust is where I drown And we fall asleep without a sound |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Jfreak that was beautiful. a wonderful poem. lovely. ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. "Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Piccaso "You do not destroy an idea by killing people; you replace it with a better one". Edward Keating Pablo Picasso ----- |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
Thanks Brian. Really appreciate it. Jfreak |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Brandon this brought a big sigh. Very tender and romantic! I love it! I love the end here, but I can't pick just one line. These were my favorites... Maiden, one who wipes away all my fears and cares So that all I see is she, and my heart lays bare In my dreams is where I lay her down On Rose petal sheets without a frown & In her love and in her trust is where I drown And we fall asleep without a sound Beautiful! |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Very very sweet J, I knew you would present a good par for the joust going on around here. Tho' it seems to have lost it's momentum (I was enjoying thoroughly the trip to medieval England!)  ~Heather |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Rose Petal Sheets.. sounds almost better than silk, my friend...   I'm not ignoring your prose stuff - I just haven't had a second to get in there to read - Give me a 24 hr reprieve?? I'm on it..  |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Jfreak~ this is sooooo romantic. Made me sigh. I loved the line "My beautiful butterfly" ( I have one tattooed on the back of my left shoulder) This is an excellent poem. -SEA |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
J~ beautiful and romantic! "rose petal sheets" mmmm that sounds heavenly  beautiful writing! take care. amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
Hey Ladies, Thanks to all of you for the comments. Becca and Heather, You guys are just great. I appreciate everything you guys say...you have always been inspirations. Nan...you have your reprieve To the rest of you I am glad that this poem has blessed you. Thank you all. Jfreak |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
J~ Absolutely love this one! so passionate.  hehe my dear god rose petal sheets huh? she must be on cloud nine! I know I would be! keep 'em coming!! Love ya Always~*~Jess~*~ "Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves." "Bleeding hearts release tears of fire" "work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last" |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
Thanks Pryncess, there is no one though in my life. Remember...only in my dreams. Hopefully one day. J~ |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi jfreak, AWESOME, WOW, This is wonderful, you write poetry like this to someone and you will not have to wait for any dreams, simply lovely. Cerenity |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Hmmmmmmm. . . a late comer??? Perhaps another round of jousting is in order!! Gentlemen, are there any takers??? Great poem. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Ahhhhhh, rose petals, butterflies, dreams, sheets.......wow!!! A late comer perhaps but a fine display of marksmanship!!! Well done sir!! |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Rose Petal sheets, chocolate dipped strawberries with cream, candles lit, romantic music playing, wow!!! you inspire my imagination! loved it! |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
Hey guys I may be a late comer, But I won't be held out of the fight. I thank you for all your comments and I am so happy that this impacted so many peoples imaginations. J~ |
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