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notlikely2 Member
since 2000-06-16
Posts 308UK |
I met my love on the internet and wrote this poem before we actually met in person. At the time I was desperate to touch her. I still am........because she is not here with me right now!!! One Touch One touch One touch is all I need To fill the gap between Our lives And though I yearn for so much more I know can never be If but one finger of mine could reach yours Then that would suffice One tiny touch One moment One lifetime One desire Would never be enough in truth But would douse enough This fire That I could bear the ache That I could bear the pain Of the everlasting minutes Till I hear your voice Again One touch Not lips, though that would be ideal One single touch Of fingertips Would heal One touch Not hair, as much as I would like To run my fingers through it On a cold and windy night One touch Not breasts Not thighs Not hips All I ask One tiny touch One single Fingertip x Love is like the mumps.....the older you are, the harder it hits you! |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Notlikely2~ WOW! This is great! I think anyone who has ever been in a long distance relationship can relate to this one! Great job.  -SEA ***VOTE*** Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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notlikely2 Member
since 2000-06-16
Posts 308UK |
Thanks Sea...but I did have some good inspiration!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is excellent expression of how it feels to need contact with someone we feel so many emotions for. wonderful writing... man can i relate... sometimes ya just want to reach thru the monitor screen  take care jm There are places inside our souls- that have never been touched. there are places inside our hearts- that need to be loved this much. jm |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Oh yeah, I can definitely relate to this one |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Excellent writing. I too wish that I could reach through my puter screen and touch just once one that I have never seen. |
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notlikely2 Member
since 2000-06-16
Posts 308UK |
Janet...Thanks.....I can fortunately tell you that I have now reached through that screen....and boy is it good!! Jeffrey...I am glad you can appreciate my feelings Mark...keep dreaming and maybe one day you will reach through as I have done. Love is like the mumps.....the older you are, the harder it hits you! |
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ynotme? Junior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 17 |
Notlikely2..this is beautiful. I know exactly how you felt when you wrote this. I have been through something similar myself. I loved the lines: One tiny touch One moment One lifetime One desire Would never be enough in truth But would douse enough This fire That I could bear the ache That I could bear the pain Of the everlasting minutes Till I hear your voice Again Lets have some more of this!! |
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notlikely2 Member
since 2000-06-16
Posts 308UK |
Thank you Ynot...I will try to write some more soon...I need to go home now...for inspiration! |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Not - this is really pretty neat the way you laid it out - I like the style |
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Beverley Member
since 2000-07-09
Posts 97England |
This is a POEM, it speaks to me. Loved it, it's beautiful. |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
This is a great poem Notlikely2. Great work Rich |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
I like this one it says alot .. How a touch can mean so much In just a scroll of fingertip Upon sculpted face or desired lips Hmm... very nice writing and presentation |
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AMaZing Junior Member
since 2000-06-26
Posts 10 |
One touch.....beautiful work!! |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
Very pretty... This can also describe the one person loves but the other person doesnt love back scenario. I liked it... Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go. |
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Lorelei54 Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 458 |
Not, we also met on the internet...and the days when we could not touch were terrible...I'd touch the PC screen, something LJA had given me, lay with my eyes closed and try to feel his touch...want to hear what finally brought him close to me when we were apart? He had a habit of keeping a cough drop in his mouth, so that was a familiar taste...I'd buy the same cough drops and that brought him close...silly, but it helped me deal with mmissing him...I'm SO glad those days are far behind us know and we are one...and know the seperations, though they do come at times, will never be for good! |
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notlikely2 Member
since 2000-06-16
Posts 308UK |
WOWEE!!!! What a response. Lngjgn Glad you liked the style...it really just created itself. Beverley..aww...you got me blushing again now!! Spiked Thanks...it is nice to be appreciated. Coco..Inspiration makes the presentation and I had plenty of that. Amazing...Thanx again. Cuddlez I guess you are right...but in our case it was just that one of us had to take the plunge to meet....and we did!! Lorelei It is good to hear of someone else who met in the same way as we did. You know we had only met five times before we decided to live together...but we knew each otherbetter than most married couples ever do. If you are honest about yourself, the internet is a wonderful way to meet. Love is like the mumps.....the older you are, the harder it hits you! |
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Bustem57 Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 98 |
Just wonderful!! I have the same feelings and you have expressed them perfectly!! |
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notlikely2 Member
since 2000-06-16
Posts 308UK |
Thank you Bustem...I'd like to hear your story someday... |
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