Open Poetry #8 |
who is Jack? |
Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
*special thanks to edward, brad, "underground boxing clubs", project mayhem, but most sincerely to Tyler Durden. couldn't have done this without your inspiration.* < !signature-->who is Jack? a portrait of Jack as told by his 2000 parts inspired by Tyler Durden i am Jack's wasted life. i am Jack's gray and cloudy cataract. the sights i filter in are not happy and proud. But they are so much brighter than the darkness i writhe in. i am Jack's tired feet. i am tired of running to the end of a tunnel that runs faster than me. i am Jack's raging hate. i pound frustrated knuckles against a stubborn doorframe. i am Jack's shallow breathing. i am conditioned to know that i can not go deeper because of the weight there on my chest. i've screwed up again.i've done something wrong. i am a failure. i am Jack's complete lack of surprise. i am Jack's weary ear drums. i bleed from the ranting that has grown into a ceaseless drone. i am Jack's bruised knees. i buckle and chatter not in Fear, but in Anticipation. i am Jack's wondering hope of a better place with good smiles. i glimmer in Jack's eye beyond the cataract. i am Jack's bleeding knowledge. i bleed because that sensation is Real. like what i know. like what i am told. like Life. i am Jack's wasted life. because i can only be what i am told i am. "You are not special. You are not a brilliant and unique snowflake. You are part of the same decaying organic matter as everyone else. We are all part of the same compost heap. We are the all-singing, all-dancing crap of the world." -Tyler Durden "On a long enough timeline, the survival rate for everyone is zero." -Tyler Durden We all got somethin' to atone for. [This message has been edited by Ethan_Halo (edited 06-13-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is AWESOME!!!--- there are so many great images and lines in this piece---hard to pick---but-- "the end of a tunnel that runs faster than me" This is INSPIRING...great work...hands red from applause.... |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Whoa!!!...*Sigh*...Wow!!!....this blows me away. So captivating and well written. It blows me away...not more for me to say. hehe. I am quite familiar with who TD is and also found this very interesting. Great work. *Bravo*. *Peace. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
But they are so much brighter than the darkness i writhe in. -------------- i am Jack's shallow breathing. i am conditioned to know that i can not go deeper because of the weight there on my chest. i've screwed up again.i've done something wrong. i am a failure. i am Jack's complete lack of surprise. i am Jack's weary ear drums. i bleed from the ranting that has grown into a ceaseless drone. ------------ i am Jack's wondering hope of a better place with good smiles. i glimmer in Jack's eye beyond the cataract. i am Jack's bleeding knowledge. i bleed because that sensation is Real. like what i know. like what i am told. like Life. i am Jack's wasted life. because i can only be what i am told i am. ------------- ethan, this poem's honesty both disturbs me and touches me... I have not seen this movie, forgive me and my woman instincts... but i cant watch those images. So i read this twice on its own merit-- and what I took from it(my interprtation) and then I asked my son who has seen the movie to fill me in on the background. I was also thinking about a couple of your other poems ive read... many lines in this effect me.. but the last one more so... you already know i disagree.. we can break free from those chains and those dark places... we are not defined by anothers verbal abuse I ve been there, i know it is possible to rise above it sometimes we may need a little help to do it but it can be done. I also saw lines of hope and glimmers of light in some of these lines... so i know you know this too i hope i have read the poem as you intended it take care my friend jm And it's good that I'm not angry, I just need to get over, I'm not angry, anymore Cry when you cry, run when you run, love when you love, represent the ashes that you leave behind ~MB20~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
serenity- thanks for the honesty. it means a lot. spit fire- it's always nice to meet a fellow fan. people said that movie sucked, but i understood it, loved it, touched it... i don't know. i felt it. it made sense!!! JM- the movie opened me up and opened the world for me in a manner i'd never seen. i was inspired to write about the Jack that "Tyler" showed me. feelin' fine. =) "You are not special. You are not a brilliant and unique snowflake. You are part of the same decaying organic matter as everyone else. We are all part of the same compost heap. We are the all-singing, all-dancing crap of the world." -Tyler Durden "On a long enough timeline, the survival rate for everyone is zero." -Tyler Durden We all got somethin' to atone for. -Ethan Halo |
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