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Shimmering Pools |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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Shimmering Pools Shimmering pools of silver moonlight Grazing upon the tears I have shed Resting gently next to the eyes of the night Smiling for the heart upon which you have tread Once pulsing with the breath of love Now gasping in the abandoned trust Resonating darkness from the heavens above Quenching my thirst from love's hidden dust Reflections of promise for a sugared tomorrow Swirling softly in a pool of my tears Puddled masses of my deepest sorrow Caressing tenderly all my heightened fears Shimmering pools of moonbean's grace Dancing upon memories of your trampled path Guiding me through the torment I now face As I weep defeated in your lover's wrath Mark Bohannan |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Mark this is EXCELLENT writing here your ache raises of the page... and the emotions are felt as each verse builds up the pain... the imagery you weaved in is a beautiful accent to those sad emotions very emotionally strong piece so sorry for the hearbreak it descibes tho. take care jm I think I could need - this in my life If you're gone - baby you need to come home there's a little bit of something me In everything in you MB20 |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Im back...did ya miss me  loli forgot to say... the rhyme is perfect... made the poem complete ok im done worshiping ...for now *smile* bye jm I think I could need - this in my life If you're gone - baby you need to come home there's a little bit of something me In everything in you MB20 |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
jm, where did you go? Please come back I miss you so!! Oh there you are. You had me thinking you just walked away. Thanks for the lovely words of praise and as always it is I who worship your sweet replies you send my way.  |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Mark* This is magnificent writing.....the part of your heart you wrote this with shows...the images are dripping with beauty and pain. Thank you so much for sharing this~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Bdc--once again you leave me blushing with your kind words.  Thank you for them and for your kind heart. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Mark, This was wonderful writing. I can feel the sadness yet I see the most lovely images. Great job. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
you make me cry...i want to take your pain away... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mark, Good thoughts, good words, good writing. |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Now how did you make 'sad' sound so 'beautiful'? Excellent writing, Mark! Denise |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
LW-thank you so much Paula- ahh don't cry Seymour-thank you for the kind words Denise-glad you liked it and found the beauty in it. Thank you for reading and responding. |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Wow Mark, this is quite a beauty. Enjoyed it very much. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Eloise- thank you so much |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Ah, this is true poetry...wonderfull..I loved this as I do all your work...keep it up..I love the reading~ Blessed Be, Beth |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Super, sweet, sensational, supream stanza, Very nice, deep and expressive with emotions over flowing, I loved it and enjoyed it, I do believe you have just entered into the realm that torments me, the realm that we call depression . L.of.L. Tom . Don't try, do or do not, there is no try . - Master Yoda - |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Mark! You Devil! Making all these ladies swoon and step forward to mend your trampled heart... *Psst, Mark. Long John here. I'm writing in italics so the ladies can't read my secret message to you. What a neat ploy that poem was! Just leave your home address lying around, and they'll all be coming over with dinner dishes and bowls of chicken noodle soup and cakes and pies and .... Ohhh, you are a sly one* |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ahhh, a touching one ... MARK this is a reMARKable poem (disregard the pun though) and accept my regards, sudhir. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Beth-As I do yours. Thank you muchly. Angelswing-glad you like it and I truely hope that you leave the realm of depression very soon. Someone has to, it is becoming too crowded. LngJhnAg-what can I say-you found me out. Just don't tell the ladies though, I am hungrey and need all those plates. LOL. The italics don't work though because I believe they all have decoders.  Sudhir-Thank you and the pun was ignored(not) thanks for reading. |
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Martini Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
Absolutely beautiful While reading this poem it brought tears to my eyes. You expressed exactly how I feel at this time in my life... Amazing work |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Martini-thank you for the reply. I am glad it touched you and I hope that "new" path is one filled with love and joy. |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
I like your style, Mark ... I'm new to this site and I like it more than most I've been to already ... Thanks. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Ma Miller-welcome to Passions. I know you will enjoy it here as do I. Looking forward to reading many of your creations. Thanks for the kind reply. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I know what this one means to you so I came back to read it again never say never |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Great way to tie in the lost romance by using the wonderful line "shimmering pools of moonlight." I thought that was an excellent way to emphasize the sadness of the heartbreak. Good job Mark! |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Seem to have missed this one on the first go 'round. Glad I was able to catch it this time. It's a beauty! You really conveyed that sense of dread and sorrow well; a little too well. I still have the feeling of uneasiness in me. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Paula- Thank you. It does mean alot to me. Ethome-That you could use the word excellent is a true compliment and I thank you for that. Trew-Thank you so much and I hope the uneasiness has left you by now. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MarkB~ Very nicely done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Marge- Thank you dear friend |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Mark~ < !signature-->what sorrow abounds in this heartache felt HUGS Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe [This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 07-17-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Tracie-There is and I thank you for reading and replying. Thanks for the hugs. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This one is just so beautiful I had to come read it again never say never |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
A heart tugger with exceptional rhyme and flow. Beautifully done Mark. Linda M. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Linda-thank you so much. You must have done quite a bit of digging to pull this one up.LOL |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Mark, This is excellent Emotion so eloquently spoken And so poetically spoken Beautiful images for the sorrow felt Liz |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
A day for quiet reading and I find such a beauty as this. Lovely ache you have here Mark. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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