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amber
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since 1999-06-15
Posts 240
los banos, ca,

0 posted 2000-07-10 04:01 PM



I wonder do you hate me,
Because love doesnt feel like this,
As you grasp my heart in your hands,
And taunt me with a kiss.

Do lies just come naturally,
From the soul that I caress,
Broken promises an action,
To put my heart at test?

Are painful words an attraction,
To the ignorance I feel,
To hold you now would mean to much,
A world that's all surreal.

Do you build up my trust,
Just to watch it fall,
Stranding me beyond believe,
In this castle that you call....your love

© Copyright 2000 amber jean white - All Rights Reserved
redheart angrybraids
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since 2000-04-16
Posts 410
honolulu, hawaii
1 posted 2000-07-10 04:15 PM


i know what you mean, great writing

Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
2 posted 2000-07-10 06:00 PM


When all we seek is for someone to love from the heart... why does it seem that we get the ones who don't even love themselves.  As sad as it is, it is so true.  Liked it alot.
Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
3 posted 2000-07-10 08:45 PM


amber,

Powerful poetry and emotions you have penned here.  It is an awful feeling when one toys with your emotions. Maybe you need a new castle to call home . . .

Nice writing.

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

amber
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since 1999-06-15
Posts 240
los banos, ca,
4 posted 2000-07-11 08:37 PM


This one shows too much of your soul beautiful sister of mine... You KNOW this castle of yours just needs a good cleaning every now and then!!! LOL Glad to see you finding time to write again...Love you...

Only after trying so hard to let go, did i realize how much i wanted to hold you forever> Amber and Ellis forever and always



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