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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
I find it funny that you say you are in love with me... For there are so many things that you simply can not see. You sing the praises of my eyes which you say are deepest blue. Yet you know nothing of the soul which they are the windows to. You love the texture of my hair, how through your fingers it does glide. Yet you know nothing of the thoughts which in this poet's mind reside. You crave the softness of my lips and the moisture of my kiss. I do believe that if I left this would be all that you would miss. You desire the fullness of my breasts. They are the objects of your desire. Yet you know nothing of the heart beneath and the dreams which fuel its fire. You enjoy the flatness of my stomach and the way my hips sway to and fro. Yet you know nothing of the knot in my gut which lets me know that it's time to go. You slide your hand from hip to toe feeling the smoothness of my legs. Yet you know nothing of the strength in them which will allow me to walk away. --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I don't know what to say here. This poem very well done and shows your strength. Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very well done! Men can be unfeeling and callous sometimes but the men whom are real lovers are interested in much more than just the physical part. Real lovers always end up being exceptionally close friends and who can be a close freind to someone they don't get to know. Great poem! Makes a great point. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Impressive. Very impressive. I love it. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Tennessee, this poem has just put you on my "must read" list. Marvelous construction and the words say so much. Fantastic writing  |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Elizabeth -- Thank you so much for your kind words. ethome -- I couldn't have said it better myself. Thank you for reading and responding to my work. And most of all...thank you for getting it! Prometheus -- I always have to look three times before spelling your name and then I probably spell it wrong, but anyway! Thank you so much for your kind response. Balladeer -- Me?!? A must read?!?! Wow, the pressure's on now. Thank you so much for your kindness. Seeing as how I've read absolutely everything you've posted...it means a lot. Thanks! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
TennesseeAngel~ What depth these thoughts reach ! 'You sing the praises of my eyes which you say are deepest blue. Yet you know nothing of the soul which they are the windows to.' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
You've captured my thoughts today..... and have done it so very well! I've often wondered why image overides substance? Hold life with an open hand....leaving it room to grow.... |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Ah, the strength of a woman..certainly not to be messed with...I loved the way you worded this poem and hope to read more~ Beth |
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