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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Faded Perfume Hot summer nights Under stars with moonlight A heart in flight Taken by love’s bite He said forever But then, a parting letter You should have known better Pale cheeks could be no wetter Love, you thought would bloom Brings nothing but gloom Dying alone in your tomb For love lasted as long.... as faded perfume It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Very well penned. The aroma of sadness is in the words. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
~Marina~ So sad, very well written. A clever way of describing a love lost like faded perfume and faded memories that linger with it's bittersweet aroma. Take care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Marina, The love may not have lasted long, but the memories sure will. Great poem. Such a sad picture you have painted. Well done. Lone Wolf Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. --William Wordsworth |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I love how you tied the title into the last line. Very well written! |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Prometheus, thank you. Melissa, thank you. I tried to discribe it just that way. LW, thank you very much. They say nothing lasts forever. I know this didn't. Ethome, thank you very much. I often do that with my poetry. Just my style I guess. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
ooohhh getting tricky and clever with the rhyme scheme are you ...  this is very creative and well written sorry so sad tho ... ever notice we write our best poetry when we are the sadddest ... ASSUMING OUR MUSE STAYS  (me muse is still moody)  but yours was well inspired to pen this gem OK..I'll shut up now LOL laterMarina-gator jm I think I could need - this in my life If you're gone - baby you need to come home there's a little bit of something me In everything in you MB20 |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Very touching work Marina.....it's always sad when love doesn't go the way we think it should~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderful Marina. . . The love may have ended. . .but the memories always remain. . . sometimes, we wish that they didn't. . . Excellent my friend. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
hey--this is a poem that I didn't have to try to enjoy-it's short and sweet, and one of the most expressive I've read in a while...thank you for sharing this! p.s.- I voted 4 it! "We have all these galaxies inside of us. And if we don't enter those in art, then I don't understand the point in doing anything."-Sam Shepard |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I too have to agree with the others and also say that the title and the way you fit in the comparison was sure genius and I loved the read. Great one my friend  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Faded Love...faded perfume...what a concept...enjoyed reading this one again...I sure would like to smell your fresh perfume...I wear musk... I remember your poem...I think it was Please go to hell...it was one of my favorites...James |
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Martinque Member
since 2000-05-17
Posts 69 |
So much said with little words. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Jan, tis' very true indeed. My muse is on summer holidays now however. Maybe our muses have run off to the Carribbean togther!! LOL Butterflies, thank you. Love is very unpredicatable there is no doubt. Sven, thank you. At first we never want to be reminded of that, but as time goes on, we see the good stuff too. Jennie May, thank you. I very much appreciate your vote and taking the time to read it. Mark, coming from a poet such as yourself......I am humbled. Thank you, my friend James, my friend you have an excellent memory!!! if I am not mistaken you also liked this one too?? Oh....and by the way.....my perfume is Fire and Ice! LOL Martinque, thank you It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fire and Ice...I mean Marina...yes I Love this poem...I understand your disappointments and frustration...when you so desperately want a relationship to blossom and fulfil your dreams and desires and it fades away...very sad...I can only hope that it doesn't happen to me this time...my hope is still in place...James |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
You are growing more and more with every read Marina This poem is an excellent example of that growth |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Marina, wow a wonderfully written poem yearning emotions and heartache even so it is beautifully penned. Thank you for sharing. "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else" faster-Manic street preachers. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
I really hope so to James!!!!! I think you are definitly on the right track. Want to borrow my perfume???? LOL Jeffery, thank you very much. Brian, thank you very much, my friend. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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