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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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WHISPERS Whispers, whispers, everywhere - Oh, Voices of the Night, Tell me what's this secret you share ‘Neath moonbeam and starlight? Oh, what would be the call of Nyx To such a place as this? Would lust yet overcome the Styx For one insipid kiss? Oh, voices in the shadows, Halt! What words say you by light? By languished wounds, by pre-groomed fault, By deviant's delight? I see your woeful eyes of hate That hope yet for my fall. That barren greed, insatiate, Beneath a "true friend's" call. Yes, denizens of Darkling lust, By voices rendered numb; Procure in shame all broken trust, But pray that I succumb. For known by Darkness, by my birth, By all disgrace cast me; A gift of love, for all it's worth, Won't bring the blind to see. As words may wound, as words may heal, But never serve two masters. By the very woe they conceal Will spells return their casters; Who, by these secrets "none need know" Yet whispered ‘fore the dawn, Shall seed the ruin, there heed the blow - The very hell they spawn! Michael Anderson |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Good to see you, Micheal! This is a wonderful poem. Every time you post, I know I'm in for a treat. May you always overcome the "voices of the night". "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very interesting - great use of words in a delightful structure. Very mystic and deep. Good work! |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
classic structure Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
a dark magical poem. wonderfully written. really enjoyed this. "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else" faster-Manic street preachers. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I see your woeful eyes of hate That hope yet for my fall. That barren greed, insatiate, Beneath a "true friend's" call. Yes, denizens of Darkling lust, By voices rendered numb; Procure in shame all broken trust, But pray that I succumb. For known by Darkness, by my birth, By all disgrace cast me; A gift of love, for all it's worth, Won't bring the blind to see. As words may wound, as words may heal, But never serve two masters. By the very woe they conceal Will spells return their casters; Who, by these secrets "none need know" Yet whispered ‘fore the dawn, Shall seed the ruin, there heed the blow - The very hell they spawn! -------------------- your command of poetic vocabulary never ceases to amaze me, as well as your command of rhyme its like second skin for you ... very intense cryptic poem here M, me thinks someone needs to take heed of this poetic forewarning. later-poetic-prophet-gator jm I think I could need - this in my life If you're gone - baby you need to come home there's a little bit of something me In everything in you MB20 |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
everything I adore in a poem. great job! Kathleen |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Michael this was awesome! For known by Darkness, by my birth, By all disgrace cast me; A gift of love, for all it's worth, Won't bring the blind to see. As words may wound, as words may heal, But never serve two masters. By the very woe they conceal Will spells return their casters; Those words speak to me. ~Miss ya~ |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
You got the magic, Michael! Corinne |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Love Bug, good to see you again, too... been away far too long me thinks...  ethome & Prometheus, so glad you enjoyed. brian, a bit more "darkness" than I probably should be delving into at this point... LOL but was good to vent, anyhow... Janet, me thinks I'd probably bleed rhyme if I were to be cut in the right place - say, the heart perhaps... Don't read to deep here, though - just purging a little sour emotion... Irish Rose, glad it touched you... Rebecca, picked a couple of "strong" verses there - Indeed, there is much meaning behind those two in particular. Corinne, me thinks I misplaced my hat though  Thank you all for the kind replies. Michael |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
LOL LOL LOL LOL AHHHHHH EXCUSE ME .... BUT I WAS JUST WONDERING.... CAN YOU SEE THE SMILE ON MY FACE "FROM WHERE YOU SIT" LOL LOL  ME SURE HOPES SO!!!!!!! MADE MY NIGHT...YA JUST DID *winkie winkie* later "skyfyre" gator LOL LOL   me loves ya ...both |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
These whispers have screamed at my heart Michael...beautiful work~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
hehe - oops! Posted my thank you's under "Skyfire"... lol. Hey, how'd her name get all over my cookies anyway??? Sorry to confuse you Janet, uh, and anyone else I may have... hehe - now I am the one red faced and smiling... LOL Michael |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
You write with such power when you are inspired ... I really couldn't think of enough good things to say about this poem even if I tried. One of your best to date, I'd say ... Smooches, --Me PS: I think you should submit this to the book ... YOUR LIFE IS A TEST It is only a test ... If this were your Actual Life, you would have been given better instructions! |
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