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Celestial Passion ... written w/Brian Madden
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Celestial Passion ... written w/Brian Madden |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~Celestial Passions~ The Cherub rolls his pearl eyes waking her from the wardrobe door, his angelic face brings sweet memories ... drifting back into her mind like so many times before. He is as a faded photograph from insomnia's edge blind, she kisses him in the exposure of where all lost loves are born. Her love for him eternal, outlasting sands of time, winds of change, realms of space. His touch ... her deliverance, his kiss ... her saving grace. Shadows drain his homogeneous flesh, in low golden dove song he whispers, "I love you, I will face God's wrath ... be Heaven's fallen disgrace, and deny an eternity for one moment in your bliss". She exists only to know his skin against hers, no sacrifice too great, now on bended knee ... she gives herself in offering. She is his fate, he is her destiny. Like Heaven and Earth, Moon and Sun, this between them is meant to be. Celestial bodies consolidate as a single soul, their skin glistening in Heavenly passion fire, with bodies writhing hypnotised by Hades' desire. Petals lay at their feet; the pistil erupts on the serpent's toll. Suns eclipse, stars align ... love and lust kiss and entwine. In between Heaven and Hell ... for just a taste, a soul to sell. Equal to Earth and Sky, this desire they shall not deny. Her mortal eyes pierce his wings of a dove, the first snow of Calvary becomes washed with blood. In ecstasy they radiate baptising pestilence with love. Ten million souls rejoice from purgatory's edge cleansed in a sensual flood. Ashes to ashes, Dust to dust, Saints and sinners, Love or Lust. Angels sing, Holy Empyrean pray, Immersed in surrender ... Inhale as Heaven washes it all away. Breath on breath slows to sigh, she curls in his wings of tender embrace, Traces of Heaven reflect in his pearl eyes. From mortal coil they witness with grace redemption for the masses as Golgotha rises from the ashes. Baptized and bathed in sweet afterglow ... he gazes into her luna lashed eyes of jade. Finding his own reflection ... their undying love on display, enchanted by her beauty, his own soul he would now trade. "Stay with me eternally, you seem too beautiful to be though in my soul I believe this is real. Once you were but a forced dream to chase away the solitude. What God or grace has granted me my angel? My true love no longer eludes". "By gift of fate or destiny, this is now a Union of Bliss, signed, sealed, and delivered ... by love's sweet forgiving kiss. In each other ... saving grace is finally found, on a wing and prayer, this love will rise up ... everlasting and heaven bound." Janet Marie & Brian Madden (adam & eve gator) LOL Thanks again for writing "pretty" with me Bri ... and inspiring me to write with more imagery ... gotta love those cherubs and petals  What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly ~LaoTzeTao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Remarkable job on this you two! Wonderful imagery, alive with feeling. Loved it! Michael |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow, Janet Marie and Brian, this is so beautiful, the imagery is amazing and the flow is perfect. You should both be so proud of this piece, it is absolutely captivating. I've re-read it three times already, it keeps getting better and better, it is a masterpiece of words and thoughts! It is an ingenius way at looking at love and soulmates, and even at that, its not as simple as that, it is an in-depth bouquet of words. And the few cliches that you use are perfect. Some would say that using cliches and famous phrases would ruin the poem, but I say that you both use them to perfection while adding a flair to it.  This should be a book submission! Ok, I've rambled long enough, but, this poem really impressed me and I stand in awe of it. I luvit! I luvit! I luvit! I'm printing out a copy to keep. A standing ovation for Janet Marie and Brian, you two, make an awesome writing pair. You should write another one together, you're both so talented!  Take care, Melissa Honeybee< !signature--> The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 07-09-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
YES!!! loved the imagery, the phrasing, simply superb---just one thing---just who's pistil erupted? gotta love it... Very beautiful...you two make a great team... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Janet and Brian what a beautiful piece of work. The words flow like a soft misty spray over a fire of undeniable passion, constantly being consumed by an underlying intensity in every line. Bravo! Well done! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Janet Marie and Brian -- you two have penned a real beauty together. The imagery is superb and this one goes in my file. Well done you two and I'll look forward to the next one. Celestial bodies consolidate as a single soul, their skin glistening in Heavenly passion fire, with bodies writhing hypnotised by Hades' desire. Petals lay at their feet; the pistil erupts on the serpent's toll. how sweet is this????!!!!!? |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
WOW! You guys did a fabulous job on this one. Words elude me here, I'm in awe! Put two great talents together and magic happens. Beautiful, glorious magic! Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. ellie LeJeune |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BrianM~ and JanetMarie~ A celestial collision of cosmic proportions ! Great job - 'he gazes into her luna lashed eyes of jade. Finding his own reflection' 'Celestial bodies consolidate as a single soul' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
I just love the way you two write together!!! You compliment each other so well. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Beautiful... I think that is the first time I have seen the word homgeneous since I had to take a class on asbestos inspection procedures....lol very nice you two. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh MY ... oh WOW ... You two work GREAT together!!! The flow, the passion, the emotions! WOW again! Loved it much!!! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
All I can say is: Wow...great collaboration! Mix two good poets and shake well..what do you get..a fantastic poem!  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet and Brian---got to add my wow! Super job...so much passion...Well done!! |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Janet and Brian - this is wonderful prose! I'm not just saying that, either - as I seldom read prose because I need more structure. But, this is superb! Rack up a vote from me. [This message has been edited by LngJhnAg (edited 07-10-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
WOW THANK YOU ALL... your response to this is so GREAT... this was a lot of fun to do... and I learned so much from Bri... and just for the record... all those "cliches" are my addition.. I HAD to use them to keep up with Bri... I mean JUST how am I gonna compete with pistals erupting  LOLBri doesnt have a cliche in his poetic dictionary.. ok will maybe just those Petals  LOL thank you all for such enthusiastic replies. take care jm |
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