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Saying Goodbye
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Saying Goodbye |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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This one was written for a very good friend and colleague, who left for a new job in a different country... but not before leaving a lasting impression... Suggestions for a better title are welcome... "Saying Goodbye" Seeking greener pastures we all go, After riches, glory, fame and dough, Taking calculated risks, at times grave, Fighting many dangers, being brave. Wading through testy waters to be first, We move in constant search of our goal, Contentment is never attained, the lust, For more, forever pushes our troubled souls At times when hurdles raise ugly hoods, attack And the going gets tougher and steep, Then, my friend, its time to hold back, To reflect for a moment and ponder deep. Be strong, may the winds support your wings, Be brave, may fear not cripple your feet, But be calm at moments when cruel things Make vengeful attempts to curtail your feat. Remember these words of a sincere friend, Who, for you, always stayed and cared, Remember the times wonderfully spend, When such thoughts were always bared I will always miss your presence much, With your charm, this heart you touched, In your absence, I will strive my level best, For, in my soul, you are a permanent guest. -----< !signature--> Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 06-29-2000).] |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
really like this, a very nice tribute to your friend, that has a lot of life's truth's  |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Enjoyed it a lot!!!!!!!! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What a wonderful goodbye! Your friend is rich, indeed... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sudhir, Great tribute to your friend. Thanks for sharing. Lone Wolf Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. --William Wordsworth |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Corazon, Thanks for your lovely response, and thank you for reading it too... vandana, I am glad that you enjoyed it... Thanks  Karilea, Your ever-present support is overwhelming... Thank You. Lone Wolf, Thank You very much for your lovely thoughts on this one... regards, sudhir |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Wonderful thoughts Your words will be for him as food for a hungry traveler. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
A beautiful way to bid your friend farewell. Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Be strong, may the winds support your wings, Be brave, may fear not cripple your feet, But be calm at moments when cruel things Make vengeful attempts to curtail your feat. Remember these words of a sincere friend, Who, for you, always stayed and cared, Remember the times wonderfully spend, When such thoughts were always bared I will always miss your presence much, With your charm, this heart you touched, In your absence, I will strive my level best, For, in my soul, you are a permanent guest. ----- Sudhir the last three verses have avery special meaning for me, as you may already know one of dearest friends moved to Australia a year ago, She too was "in my soul,......a permanent guest" tahnk you for sharing this beautiful poem and for bringing back a torrent of joyous memories. THank you. "Death makes angels of us all and put wings where we once had shoulders, smooth as raven's wings. Jim Morrison |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
"a permanent guest" what a lovely expression. I loved this. Kathleen |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
More folks need an opportunity not to miss this treasure... |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Excellently done and a very nice gift to your friend. Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Beautifully done Sir title suggestion ... ' Carry This With You Where You Go ' Rex |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
What a great way to say goodbye. So tastefully done and with such sincerity. Excellent work! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Sudhir, another for my file from your wizardry. The title fits and good-byes are ok as long as the heart never has to voice them. Wonderful tribute and very sentimental [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 07-09-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Now this came out of a closet or what! Many Thanks are due to all of you dear friends for reading this. Jamie, thanks for bringing this up, so others could read this.... Lizzie, Thanks a million... Brian, I am glad that I could bring back the good memories... I can feel for you, my friend... really. Thanks Kathleen, I am happy that you found the expresssion to be good... Thanks for reading... Karilea, The ever present support... Thank You Elizabeth, Thanks for reading... Rex, I like the "beautiful" response... and nice title suggestion too... I will think about this one for some time ... Thanks ethome, You are very kind... and appreciating... Thanks. Mark, wizardry, eh? I hope this aint black magic... he he . Thanks for reading adn for your lovely response... regards to all, I feel much appreciated. Sudhir. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This was an absolutely wonderful tribute to your co-worker and friend Sudhir! The last line is simply perfect! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
This is wonderful and sincere....... It's always hard to say goodbye, but you left me with the thought that those we say goodbye to are really always with us.... Thank you for this piece, especially today......... Hold life with an open hand....leaving it room to grow.... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Breathtaking work Sudhir, my favorites..... Be strong, may the winds support your wings, Be brave, may fear not cripple your feet, But be calm at moments when cruel things Make vengeful attempts to curtail your feat I will always miss your presence much, With your charm, this heart you touched, In your absence, I will strive my level best, For, in my soul, you are a permanent guest. ----- We meet many people in our lives but there are always those that make the lasting impression on our hearts.....like this one did for you, thank you for sharing that with us~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Kit, "perfect" you say, oh thank you... sunny, I am glad to leave that impression, and thank you for your kind words... butterflies_dont_cry, thats something very special you said... thank you for sharing your thoughts, and reading the poem of course... regards, sudhir Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Lovely poem, Sudhir, and sad as it is, life is full of goodbyes. My parents are at an age where they now say goodbye to friends at funerals, since they are all old and dying one by one. Only one thing I'd suggest changing in this poem, the word "dough" is kind of a cliche, not sure what I'd suggest in place of it. Just a suggestion. Take care, I enjoy reading your stuff! Corinne |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
What a nice message to your friend....good bye and hello fill our lives...change and moving is a good thing and so is writing letters. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Corinne, Thanks for your appreciative words... All the time since I wrote this one, I have been thinking of that one word dough, it is cliche - could mean bread(food) or money(not perfectly English in the sense of the word), and I am not vey sure what I meant when I first wrote it, but later just couldn't find anything to fit in, probably will have to rework the entire line or even the stanza... (and that is a risk), because what I wrote then were feelings from within, now things could mess themselves up if not taken care of. Could you suggest an alternative line, though, I will be very grateful... regards and thanks, sudhir |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Martie, Your beautiful words came in while I was responding... thanks a lot regards, sudhir |
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