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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Us Embrace me still, hold fast my love despite, These perilous, uncertain, daunting days. With strength of unity will love requite The lurking evils thick along the way. Malevolence so armed with empty threats And rooted in a bed of hollow lies, Is destined to a life of long regrets, As bonded hope each onslaught so defies. Impervious to undeserved attacks Against this fiendish foe stalwart we’ll stand And watch as truth and purity exact The due that such committed love demands. No fear, no tainted guilt nor false remorse Will stay our passion's unrelenting course. [This message has been edited by David2 (edited 06-12-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is so beautiful, David! I absolutely love your couplet!  Denise |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
WOOOHOOO! I just LOVE a good sonnet ... ... and this one is indeed "good," if that simple word does it justice. Your theme was well-developed and held throughout, and the couplet an impeccable finish. "The lurking evils thick along the way" (shudder -- great line!) "And watch as truth and purity exact The due that such committed love demands." Sheer eloquence! I stand agog -- well, not really, but it was darn good ... More, more! --Kess < !signature--> YOUR LIFE IS A TEST It is only a test ... If this were your Actual Life, you would have been given better instructions! [This message has been edited by Skyfyre (edited 06-12-2000).] |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Well done. Enjoyed muchly. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
me thinks when you talk on the phone... you talk in sonnet meter and time... me thinks you talk sonnet in your sleep too  exceptional D2 ...your vocabulary choices in this make the poem even more graceful and effective later-couplet-gator jm And it's good that I'm not angry, I just need to get over, I'm not angry, anymore Cry when you cry, run when you run, love when you love, represent the ashes that you leave behind ~MB20~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
David...never a dissapointment from you |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~david this was exceptional! you write sonnets extremely well to say the least. i loved the choice of words and flow in this one. great piece take care. amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Extremely well done David ... my hat is off to your brilliance in this lovely verse! Best wishes, /Kit |
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emmalouise Junior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 26 |
Well, this is passable, I guess, but can you write one in Italian?? (Kidding.) Bravissimo! Molto bello! |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Dear emma, I don't know but I can try! David2 |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Beautiful is thy heart sir David! |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
grrrr I have typo fingers today sorry bout the double post [This message has been edited by X Angel (edited 06-19-2000).] |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
*sigh* I do love this poem!  You are truly one of the great romantic poets on passions! Good job! ~Heather |
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