Open Poetry #8 |
The Middle, Chapter II [inspired by Sven] |
Sunshine
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The Middle, Chapter II [inspired by Sven] I saw her on the Nile her beauty foretold her reign in gold… my death was unnoticed my arrival was unnoticed… I was there I watched Him walk before the world knew what He would do… my death was better my arrival was unnoticed… I suffered mightily for the Peace that wouldn’t come King’s Lords over rode I was overcome… my death now searched at the place of this birth… I spoke to Napoleon before Josephine arrived he was so alive his passions wouldn’t survive… of a passing no record my life of little worth… only woman, only husband to listen to the hoof beats to run from tyranny to explore new lands…retreat… we found a new world She had a light in her hand… I tilled ground fought for the right to live beside the red American who held my babe… you can still see my cross over my grave… today I wonder when all things foreign seem right deep in night’s night in the absence of light When did I begin? When will I really end… 27 June 2000 ©Karilea Rilling Jungel Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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X Angel Senior Member
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Posts 1521Oregon |
ahhhh this was neat! |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Liking iteven more! Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP "Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway |
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Sunshine
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Chapter III is posted, my friends...enjoy! I hope it meets with your expectations... |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
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Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
I loved this....great writing!!! Great story!! Julie :) |
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Sunshine
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Julie Ann, thank you for letting me know...I hope the ending meets your expectations... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
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Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Continuing to love it so off to chapter 3 I go. |
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Sunshine
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Thank you Mark! |
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BSC
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Patience never has been one of my finer attributes......this is great, now, on to chap. 3. Bonnie |
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brian madden Member Elite
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Posts 4374ireland |
This just keeps getting better..wow amazing piece thus far. On to the the last chapter, though I wish there was more.... "Death makes angels of us all and put wings where we once had shoulders, smooth as raven's wings. Jim Morrison |
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Sunshine
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Brian, perhaps a different tack, same subject, I will ponder on it... thank you for your kind comments... |
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Sven
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Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Amazing yet again!! Shows that sometimes we were just players in history. . .and that at other times, we may have made history. . . Does this speak to the fact that perhaps we are a spirit that fills a new body for each life? In other words, when my body dies, does my spirit seek another body to fill? Another life to lead? Does the spirit still live? And if so, why do we not take the memories of our past lives with us? I'll ask those questions in Feelings. . . please discuss amongst yourselves!! ------------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
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And I will visit feelings just to see where this leads... thank you... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
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Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, Good form, good words, good writing. *L* |
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Sunshine
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Sy, these comments I will hold quite close, thank you! Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Karilea, OK, I will just say one word and move on... I cant wait any longer to read the next part... and the word is REMARKABLE regards, sudhir |
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Sunshine
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Oh Sudhir, thank you... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Marge Tindal
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Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ You've searched and walked among the spirits of the past - I'm certainly not surprised to find that we 'walked together' in the past ..... you've known it too .... 'I tilled ground fought for the right to live beside the red American who held my babe…' A long time in passing - and yet all the yesterdays are brought forward into today. O'Siyo, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Sunshine
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Marge, thank you for your kind words...my friend... |
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