Open Poetry #8 |
Crossings |
Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
It was and then thusly created a quiet Connection In crowded nothing-space muddling through warring Wants of wanting to be wanted needing to know and pleasurable Understanding In the simple-ness of silence though not silence I can hear you Feel the delicate pinpricks of curiosity Dancing 'cross skin and seeming knowing In the eyes of a stranger Met mid-way Between two points of life and past Perceptions Knowing the unsaid Thoughts Thinking the unspeakable Left only to let slip A hollow Sigh To float in distance Dissipated Lost to for-never miles Wondering in after-musings I can cannot hear you Of wherefore and how The knowing of Peace in A garden of spring blooms Brushes of petals soft 'pon willing open hands ne'er blood drawn nor prick left from unseen stems and thorns hidden For a moment was peace albeit the small imperfection of a perfect friendship marred with a single kiss [This message has been edited by Satiate (edited 06-12-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Ooohhh...but I do like this..... "Feel the delicate pinpricks of curiousity..." nicely put...and I must confess, this is a lesson I had to learn the hard way...(no pun intended?) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Satiate~ Absolutely awesome. 'For a moment was peace albeit the small imperfection of a perfect friendship marred with a single kiss' Beautiful, lady. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Been there, done that -- there is always a risk we take, no? All the smiles and reassurances in the world can never repair the blow a friendship takes when it crosses "that" line ... But then, without chances taken, there are no victories won -- so, the question becomes, at what price friendship...? Somber questions, all. And well-framed here, I might add, Madame Poetess ... --Kess YOUR LIFE IS A TEST It is only a test ... If this were your Actual Life, you would have been given better instructions! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
... ... ... I'm... speechless... Nic, this, as lonely, sad, hopeless as it is, is the most enthralling poem I've read. It is definitely your best. I sit here in a mix of awe and wonder... sighing, smiling, then sighing again. It even brought a tear to my eye. If there's power in words, you've proven it here. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Enjoyed very much. Excellent poem. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
serenity, ah yes, always a lesson, always a lesson. Thank you dear. Marge, Thank you so much, hun. Kess, Life just seems to be a string of risks, and true...Nothing ventured, nothing gained. In light of that, I think that when a friendship takes that kind of a blow - and grows in strength because of it...therein lies a true victory. High compliment from you, thank you! Chris, Your reply leaves me speechless. I hope a very warm and sincere 'thank you' will suffice. Mike, Thanks! [This message has been edited by Satiate (edited 06-13-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"created a quiet Connection In crowded nothing-space muddling through warring Wants" Breath-taking Satiate ... you've described this dilemma so well, your imagery is wonderful in this verse, and your ending, superb! Best wishes, /Kit |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
An amazing poem...just wow. Especially loved the last piece. The knowing of Peace in A garden of spring blooms Brushes of petals soft 'pon willing open hands ne'er blood drawn nor prick left from unseen stems and thorns hidden For a moment was peace albeit the small imperfection of a perfect friendship marred with a single kiss ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. manic street preachers "Culture Alienation Borebom and Despair" "I know I believe in nothing but it is my nothing" -faster MSP "And you see, I kind of shiver to conformity Did you see, the way I cower to authority, you see And my life, it's a series of compromises anyway It's a sham, and I'm conditioned to accept it all, you see" six by Paul Draper. ----- |
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