Open Poetry #8 |
Until Your Journey Is Done |
Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
This is was submitted and accepted to the main Passion's site. It was submitted then under the name Thoughtful Dreamer. All the nights we laughed and talked, Of deepest thoughts and untold truths, Stay on my mind as I think of you. Your life has taken a new turn. Bridges not yet crossed are even burned. As you tread your path anew, I sit on your heart as a friend, Like a whisper kiss of morning's dew. As I think of your words, Your thoughts and your voice, I wanted to tell you to hold you head high, And set your jaw at a determined level; For you are deserving of much, Despite all you may have done. We have all sinned my friend. We have all tested, Then plunged deep into the water, Of temptations, Coming forward as wiser people from it. Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Lovely!!! I remember reading this and didn't know you posted under that name! Cool! |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"We have all tested, Then plunged deep into the water, Of temptations, Coming forward as wiser people from it. " Great lines here, Jenn... what a thoughtful and provocative piece! I like it VERY much! |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Wonderful, book worthy piece Temptress! You speak such wisdom here and do it so well! *Krista Knutson* "We are not seperate from spirit, we are in it." ~Plotinus~ |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
This is my cup of tea...well ya know what I mean LOL I thought this was most excellent! I know I've done my share of plunging. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Made me think, good work here! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Superb Temptress. . . Sometimes, you have to take that plunge!! Great poem!! ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Temptress~ Enjoyed especially this line - 'I sit on your heart as a friend, Like a whisper kiss of morning's dew.' Exquisite. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
ahhh the well of talent in the main site shows here..good job temptress |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
the meaning goes deep...i can relate to every word....to be forgiven is truely a blessing but to forgive is the ultimate test!!! Great writing...I needed to read this. Julie :) |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Oh how wise you are...many tests to go through in our long journey through life..well done Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Jenn, Temptress, Lilith, Mississippi Peach, this is truly a wonderful poem. Like deVine, I never knew the original alias on this poem was you...geeze, sometimes I think you have even more alias than Nan. Girl, ya done got my vote. Alicat, the Persnikitty |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
This is definitely a piece for all to read. I love the message and the flow was pure grace. Great one. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Yeah, I know this well! Wonderful job Jenn ~Heather |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Me too? LOL... Can I be wiser??? |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
wonderful piece, really enjoyed it. A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Ah, yes... You and that 'friend' do indeed deserve a vote for this one... being wiser now, and all.. |
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