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Temptress
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0 posted 2000-07-06 10:19 PM


This is was submitted and accepted to the main Passion's site. It was submitted then under the name Thoughtful Dreamer.  


All the nights we laughed and talked,
Of deepest thoughts and untold truths,
Stay on my mind as I think of you.
Your life has taken a new turn.
Bridges not yet crossed are even burned.
As you tread your path anew,
I sit on your heart as a friend,
Like a whisper kiss of morning's dew.

As I think of your words,
Your thoughts and your voice,
I wanted to tell you to hold you head high,
And set your jaw at a determined level;
For you are deserving of much,
Despite all you may have done.
We have all sinned my friend.
We have all tested,
Then plunged deep into the water,
Of temptations,
Coming forward as wiser people from it.

  




Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau"



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Poet deVine
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1 posted 2000-07-06 10:27 PM


Lovely!!! I remember reading this and didn't know you posted under that name! Cool!  
doreen peri
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2 posted 2000-07-06 10:28 PM


"We have all tested,
Then plunged deep into the water,
Of temptations,
Coming forward as wiser people from it. "

Great lines here, Jenn... what a thoughtful and provocative piece! I like it VERY much!

Alwye
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3 posted 2000-07-06 11:10 PM


Wonderful, book worthy piece Temptress!  You speak such wisdom here and do it so well!  

*Krista Knutson*

"We are not seperate from spirit, we are in it." ~Plotinus~

WhtDove
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4 posted 2000-07-06 11:27 PM


This is my cup of tea...well ya know what I mean   LOL

I thought this was most excellent! I know I've done my share of plunging.


Nicole
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5 posted 2000-07-06 11:33 PM


Made me think, good work here!


Sven
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6 posted 2000-07-06 11:59 PM


Superb Temptress. . .

Sometimes, you have to take that plunge!!

Great poem!!

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl



Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2000-07-07 12:37 PM


Temptress~

Enjoyed especially this line -

'I sit on your heart as a friend,
Like a whisper kiss of morning's dew.'

Exquisite.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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wayoutwalt
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8 posted 2000-07-07 01:25 AM


ahhh the well of talent in the main site shows here..good job temptress
JulieAnn
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9 posted 2000-07-07 01:57 AM


the meaning goes deep...i can relate to every word....to be forgiven is truely a blessing but to forgive is the ultimate test!!! Great writing...I needed to read this.  

Julie :)



tracie66
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10 posted 2000-07-07 05:31 AM


Oh how wise you are...many tests to go through in our long journey through life..well done
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Alicat
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11 posted 2000-07-07 08:21 AM


Jenn, Temptress, Lilith, Mississippi Peach, this is truly a wonderful poem.  Like deVine, I never knew the original alias on this poem was you...geeze, sometimes I think you have even more alias than Nan.  

Girl, ya done got my vote.


Alicat, the Persnikitty

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
12 posted 2000-07-07 08:28 AM


This is definitely a piece for all to read.  I love the message and the flow was pure grace.  Great one.
X Angel
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13 posted 2000-07-07 12:06 PM


Yeah, I know this well! Wonderful job Jenn  
~Heather

Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
14 posted 2000-07-07 12:58 PM


Me too? LOL... Can I be wiser???  
brian madden
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15 posted 2000-07-07 02:05 PM


wonderful piece, really enjoyed it.

A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

Nan
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16 posted 2000-07-07 03:38 PM


Ah, yes... You and that 'friend' do indeed deserve a vote for this one... being wiser now, and all..
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