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JP
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0 posted 2000-07-06 12:55 PM


I am a simple man with extraordinary ideals
I wonder at the glory and power I see about me in life's dance
I hear the piccolo strains of Angel song
I see the godhood emanating from humanity
I want to cahin the preterhuman state which is our birthright
I am a simple man with extraordinary ideals

I pretend to see reason in chaos
I feel a need to believe in the supernatural
I touch the souls of those about me - often not lightly
I worry that I will die without becoming who I should be
I cry thinking about grandkids I will never see
I am a simple man with extraordinary ideals

I understand life is hard - and it is well worth it
I say "every damn thing is your own fault, if you're any good"
I dream of one day flying without aid and knowing all
I try to be fairminded, tolerant, and accepting
I hope that my life gives others power to excel
I am a simple man with extraordinary ideal.


[This message has been edited by JP (edited 07-06-2000).]

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brian madden
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ireland
1 posted 2000-07-06 02:07 PM


Jp wonderful poem, beautifully written.

A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

Poet deVine
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2 posted 2000-07-06 08:03 PM


JP, not such a simple man. But a good man! With high ideals.  
JP
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3 posted 2000-07-07 10:23 AM


Thanks PdV, Bri... appreciate the sentiments.

The original challenge by Angel X was to write a poem with each line begining with:


              I am
              I wonder
              I hear
              I see
              I want
              I pretend
              I feel
              I touch
              I worry
              I cry
              I understand
              I say
              I dream
              I try
              I hope
            
All in all, it was not an easy challenge.  I would like to see this challenge revived - any takers?


Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
JP

"Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway

Jamie
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Blue Heaven
4 posted 2000-07-07 11:14 AM


A good job on a difficult task

Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


X Angel
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since 1999-11-07
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5 posted 2000-07-07 01:03 PM


JP this was wonderful. I was really floored by the insight into YOU. I think I'll play too, I have the original template somewhere here...with directions!

*looking*
~Heather

JP
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Loomis, CA
6 posted 2000-07-08 11:32 AM


Good Heather!  I loved the original challenge and cannot wait to see what the wonderful poets at this, the best poetry home in the world can come up with.

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
JP

"Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway

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