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Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
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0 posted 2000-07-06 11:10 AM


     

Cut patterns catch the light
A dance of rainbow wings
Devoid of partner in the night
An empty song it sings
~*~
Filled with springtime blooms
Adorning a table for you
The impending wither looms
It’s worthless when you’re through
~*~
Filled with flowers silk and dried
It brings no life to those
A failure surely if it tried
You are what fills you I suppose
~*~
So place upon the shelf with care
Chipped side turned toward the wall
A use for it is oh so  rare
Wonder why it’s here at all
~*~
One swift blow of careless thought
A thousand pieces on the floor
An identical can not be bought
So I’ve trapped it behind a door
~*~
Remaining safe but unoccupied
Within the glass case of protection
Filled with tears that won’t be cried
A solidified object of imperfection
~*~






[This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 07-07-2000).]

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Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
1 posted 2000-07-06 11:46 AM


Exceptional poem here, Butterflies_dont_Cry...

I can imagine the pain your heart feels...particularly when you say...

One swift blow of careless thought
A thousand pieces on the floor
An identical can not be bought
So I’ve trapped it behind a door

Remaining safe but unoccupied
Within the glass case of protection
Filled with tears that won’t be cried
A solidified object of imperfection
----

All I can offer is some solace, and say that unless your come out of the closure - the shell and open up to the world around you, the vase of your heart will remain hidden behind the door closeted towards oblivion... and may I remind you that it is not an object of imperfection at all... So
Fly dear butterfly,
High into the sky,
and let the world wonder,
dazzled by your heart's glow

Regards and take care,
Sudhir

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-07-06 11:46 AM


WOW.....
girl this is AWESOME and BEAUTIFUL ..
this is one of your most well written and conceived poems
its emotions are so well expressed...
the imagery is excellent
Its perfect SS...
and its written from that place deep in ones heart that many cant touch...
wonderful writing and poetic growth...
where is the submit box my sweet  
i love this amazing poem
you too
jm

What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly
~LaoTzeTao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~


Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
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3 posted 2000-07-06 12:30 PM


Sudhir* Thank you for your beautiful poetic reply, I'm touched by the kind reply.

Janet* Ok you have caught me at a point where I don't have the strength to fight with ya    actually I had meant to submit it....lol ya right  Thank you as always for the gentle nudge of support...or would that be KICK?!    

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
4 posted 2000-07-06 12:39 PM


With the beauty of this tear filled vase, it would be a loss to us all for it to remain
hidden.  Come out and join us; we need your
words, your beauty, your heart.  Beautiful poem BDC

Jamie
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since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168
Blue Heaven
5 posted 2000-07-06 01:14 PM


Love it.
Heavy with heartfelt sadness.

Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

6 posted 2000-07-06 02:06 PM


A kick?? OH NO not little ole me...
think of it as more of a love tap--
from a MISSOURI MULE LOL
what ever works...
just as long as I get my way LOL
but this one really is special and should be in the book as a reflection of your work.
love ya SS
thanks for all the support you show me as well...
you know... I know... sisters know ...poets know  
later-sweet-gator
jm

TerryW
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since 2000-03-23
Posts 779
Louisville, Mississippi, USA
7 posted 2000-07-06 04:26 PM


ButerfliesDC~
     I love the beauty in this work of art, my dear!


One swift blow of careless thought
A thousand pieces on the floor
An identical can not be bought
So I’ve trapped it behind a door
                                                     ~*~
                                          Remaining safe but unoccupied
Within the glass case of protection
Filled with tears that won’t be cried
A solidified object of imperfection
                                                     ~*~

This is so beautiful.  Your words are a song to my heart!  



Love Ya~

~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
8 posted 2000-07-06 04:29 PM


Back for a second read and a flick oops a (click)...

regards and take care,
Sudhir

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9 posted 2000-07-06 04:33 PM


ButterfliesDC~
A fragile piece of your heart.
Lovely, dear.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Butterflies_dont_cry
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Posts 3733
Michigan
10 posted 2000-07-06 09:28 PM




Mark* Thank you once again for a reply from
the heart...there is nothing more appreciated

Jamie* Thank you for reading, I'm glad you
liked it

Janet* There is so much comfort in knowing
that you know    Now to find the ice for
that bruise!

Terry* Usually I only can hum a bar or two
I'm pleased I found the words this time.  
Thank you for reading

Sudhir* What a sweet man you are! Thank you  

Marge* Your replies always make me smile,
Thank you from the bottom of my heart

P.S. I made a title change...I am terrible at
putting a title on these, this one I really didn't like.  Sorry to confuse anyone  

Gemini
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since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203
Wisconsin, USA
11 posted 2000-07-06 09:34 PM


Butterflies: Indeed a heartfelt piece, lovely and sad.  The perfect blend for which books are made of.  
Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
12 posted 2000-07-06 10:21 PM


BDC,

This is fabulous writing my friend!!!  A treasure of such value and beauty should be shared and appreciated as it deserves to be.  You know, that chip just makes it all the more valuable.  

I loved this one.  **AW HUGS** to you sweet butterfly.

LW



Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility.
--William Wordsworth

kat
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since 2000-05-20
Posts 387

13 posted 2000-07-06 11:04 PM


Butterflies:  This peice is so touching. You've really created a gem with this one and I'm so glad you decided to submit it for the book.  


kat

[This message has been edited by kat (edited 07-06-2000).]

Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
14 posted 2000-07-06 11:09 PM


Beautiful writing, Butterflies, and the poetic construction is VERY well done. I like it very much
EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
15 posted 2000-07-07 03:38 AM


Awesome work here my friend, special indeed! But what happened to that submit button?

God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown



Bustem57
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since 2000-06-09
Posts 98

16 posted 2000-07-07 04:44 AM


What to say? Hmmm..nothing!! It was wonderful and beautifuly written. Thank you!!
Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
17 posted 2000-07-07 08:29 AM



Gemini* Thank you so much for your kindness

L.W.* You my dear are the sweetest!  The chip
comment.........I just loved it..ya know you
are so right   Thank you!

Kat* Thank you very much for your sincere
comments, and thank you for reading.

Balladeer* I'm touched, thank you very much
I never know when I'm plagued by emotion if
I've actually written anything but tears....
to have you say it's good feels VERY good  

EagleOne* Maybe they took your submit box!...
must have know you are biased...lol   It was
there honest! Thank you my friend...your
comments mean more than any "check" mark~

OOOP's when I changed the title it "un-checked" the
submit box......all fixed....thanks J.M.  

Bustem* Thank you so much for reading and
for your kind reply.


[This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 07-07-2000).]

EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
18 posted 2000-07-07 07:27 PM


   ..well now you have my comments and a check mark.    Take care!

God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown



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