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Suffer in Silence
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Suffer in Silence |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I don't know how to say it poetically, I'm not gonna dress it up in rhyme. I lack the fancy words to tell you ... God, I just miss you all the time. There's no point in trying to deny it, I doubt I could even define it with my verse. What I lost in you seems to have taken my words, the silence of this ache, now seems to be my curse. I don't think I'm ever gonna learn, I have been falling like this for so long. Still I refuse to say you were a mistake ... It felt too damn right to ever feel wrong. So I guess I choose to suffer in silence, I'll just beg my muse for every single verse and every last line. I'm not gonna think of you with regret ... cause with you ... for a little while ... I had a taste of something fine. Janet Marie ----------------- ~Leave~ MB20 It's amazing how you make your face just like a wall how you take your heart and turn it off how I turn my head and lose it all It's unnerving how just one move puts me by myself there you go just trusting someone else now I know I put us both through hell I'm not saying there wasn't nothing wrong I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me I'm not saying we ever had the right to hold on I just didn't wanna let it get away from me ... [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 07-06-2000).] |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
JM, my heart aches deeply for you my friend. This is raw and vivid emotion. Your words convey such sorrow, but you do it so well. But then, I've learned to expect that from you. Wonderful job.  *Krista Knutson* "We are not seperate from spirit, we are in it." ~Plotinus~ |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Janet, I don't know else to say but WOW!!! With emotions this raw only words from the heart could describe it. No need for rhyme or reason, only pure honest emotion. I truly feel the pain throughout this piece. You wear your heart well m'friend |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Dear Janet Marie ... my heart ached with every line I read. Pure honest emotions straight from the heart this is. Wonderful writings! Best wishes, /Kit |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Such heartache hon, such sorrow. The poets pen never lies and holds the key to all our emotions. Lots of emotions here in this Always take care Love tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
.gif) Janet* Your heart bled in every line sweetie... it tore softly and then it ripped. No we wouldn't regret it because it feels to sweet at the moment...what a pair we make...lol Bring on the pain and watch the show!! I don't think I'm ever gonna learn, I have been falling like this for so long. Still I refuse to say you were a mistake ... It felt too damn right to ever feel wrong. **Angel Wing Hugs** I know you fought for this one....pain inspires but when it runs deep it's lost withing the raging waters of our heart....more will come and when they do.......I'm standing on high ground with my kleenex in hand and a rope to pull you back out when you need it!! Take care...love ya!! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Janet Marie--tears came up with this one and I know the pain well. What is it that happens to cause the downsurge in a love that started so strong. I ache all over for you |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
An amazing collection of pure emotions from you Janet, and you say that your muse is gone amiss... come on, cheer up... and keep writing... regards, sudhir |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I just don't know what to day...feel like I've eavesdropped on you...me loves ya, and I know you KNOW I know---nothing to it but to just go through it...sigh...me 2 |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh hon...no one should have to suffer in silence and as always, it seems you have just the right words to express your feelings. So sad, but one we all can relate to. |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Oh JM, I could feel the heartache in this one, so full of emotion, but so beautifully written. Bonnie |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Not sure what's worse, the silence when noone is there or the silence when they are. None the less, does anyone ever get used to the echos of rememberance left lingering in the heart when they're gone? JM, your words are so full of emotion, as usually is the case. Here's lookin at you kid! BEH A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
WOOWH Jan, what can I say but I hope everything is ok, thanks for sharing and always you hit my heart with your words. Take care. A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thank you my poetic pals...you always touch me with your words and make me smile... thank you for always understanding my need to write these "emotional outbursts put to rhyme" LOL ya know i love ya all...right?  well ya do now *smile* later-sweet-gators jm What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly ~LaoTzeTao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Holly Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 127Arkansas |
Janet- The emotion you put into this is so raw and just amazing work. The only word that keeps coming back to my mind is "WOW". The line that I love is: "I don't think I'm ever gonna learn, I have been falling like this for so long. Still I refuse to say you were a mistake ... It felt too damn right to ever feel wrong." gosh..that says it all. AMAZING WORK dear! love & all, -Holly I know well what I am fleeing from but not what I am in search of. Michel de Montaigne |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Janet Marie, only time heals a broken heart, wish you a speedy recovery. Lovely poem. Corinne |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
JM, This was a very vivid look into a heart that has been hurt so deeply. Most of us can relate to your pain very well I think. You wouldn't change the way you feel if you could because you have sweet memories of a love that is no longer. No one can take those away from you my friend. This was so touching. Wonderful expression and look into your heart of gold. Lone Wolf Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. --William Wordsworth |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Oh Janet, again such emotion in this one. I know the feeling very well. You really know how to express your emotions beautifully and I always love reading your works. Thanks for sharing this one with us. kat |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
You have the gift to "tell it as it is" with your writing my friend. This is very sad, Jan. I am very sorry you are going through such a hard time. Hugs, Jannie-gator!!! Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
JM, I'd swear my screen took on a sad look while showing your poem. It takes a great deal of talent to be able to accurately depict so much sincerity and emotion in a poem and you obviously have it. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Butterfly Slippers, Your muse is lying to you -- you're writing great. Would that more of us could write so cleanly, concisely and with so much impact. Mike |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
What can I say....Absolutely beautiful... Blessed Be, Beth |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
It's all been said, except this hug from me...so HUG!! |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
O My.....JM this I can relate to extremely well and MB20 being my favorite group it is just awesome!!! This is a keeper...going straight into my library......Great writing from you at your best...though they all are very good...I just can't express how much this spoke to me...Great work!! ;() Julie :) |
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