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Sister sun and brother moon (inspired by Marge Tindal)
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Sister sun and brother moon (inspired by Marge Tindal) |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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I got the inspiration to write this poem after reading "Mother Earth - Father Sky" by Marge. The image of Sister Sun and Brother moon popped into my head. Thanks to Marge for being a great inspiration. ========================================= She rises to dreary eyed, peeling the nocturnal blankets from the sandman's children. They awaken to shed the night and cleanse the nasty mares from the web of their dream catchers. She kisses the faces of summer youth washing euphoria upon the children's faces. the saddest tear melts under her breath the petals open only to her light. As the day progresses she becomes sleepily, Sister Sun shines the brightest, needs to rest in lullabies on pillow clouds. even in deepest sleep she shines on the other hemisphere. As she lays down to sleep Brother Moon appears, from behind the darkened clouds. He looks down on those tired eyes, heads rest in ease as he keeps his vigil. Brother Moon a dull monument. Some dare to say he is but substitute for his great sister. These fools do not see that he is the subtle weaver of dreams. Only such a gentle soul could make the tides change at mere request. Gracefully, unseen, he conducts the nocturnal symphony where the stars shimmer of harmonic waves. < !signature--> A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 07-05-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Brian~ I am so touched by your render of 'Sister Sun - Brother Moon'. The greatest compliment to a poet is to know they gave another poet inspiration ... you compliment me with your penned beauty. You did a marvelous job on this and I happen to think it is just lovely. I think that the timing couldn't have been more perfect for you to have penned a relationship so lovely as to remind me of my dear brother who has gone to rest and left me to stand the sentry with his son. Thank you through my tears. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She kisses the faces of summer youth washing euphoria upon the children's faces. the saddest tear melts under her breath the petals open only to her light. As the day progresses she becomes sleepily, Sister Sun shines the brightest, needs to rest in lullabies on pillow clouds. even in deepest sleep she shines on the other hemisphere. As she lays down to sleep Brother Moon appears, from behind the darkened clouds. He looks down on those tired eyes, heads rest in ease as he keeps his vigil. --------------------- oh i do so love when you write "pretty"...  and this one is oh so lovely and YOU KNOW I am NOT going to miss the fact that you used "PETAL" in this LOL which is "Heaven" to me LOL the only thing missing was a CHERUB and I'd be in Bliss LOL OK I'm done now  excellent Bri...Pooh would be proud later-pretty-poet-gator (hehe) jm What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly ~LaoTzeTao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Brian--this poem is so full and bright and beautiful...you really know how to sing with your words...and I like the song! Marge is pretty insprirational, isn't she. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Brian, wow, this is exceptional. What a way with words you have, I enjoyed this muchly  Isn't it great to look at the universe in a different light and personify the earth, sky, moon and stars and give it more depth and beauty, I love this theme Take care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Marge, thank you for your response. I am glad that you approve.LOL no seriously thank you for your words and may God bless your brother. I am sorry to hear that he is gone to rest. Jan, how could I write a pretty poem without the word "petal". Well at least I used the image in a nice way instead of my usual dark side. I will include the cherub next time. I can only hope to watch in the shadow of the master that is Winnie the Pooh. Thanks your your beautiful reply. Martie, sing is one thing I can't do. Ask anyone who ever saw me do drunken Karoke. LOL Thank you for your wonderful words. Melissa, I do believe that we are the stuff of stars and that we are part of the universe. It is alive in its own way. Thansk for your wonderful response. A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You have penned a masterpiece and I love the way you visualize the offerings of our world. Marge sure inspired you to perfection. Congrats. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
WOW Bri, I don't know if I have ever replied to one of your posts or not, I truly do love your work though, This piece especially. With it's tell of a relationship that most folks take for granted. They don't ever take the time to think about how the sun and the moon are related to each other. I hope that made sense |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
In a word: breathtaking! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Brian! The words, the images ... in a word ... stunning. Beautifully penned! Best wishes, /Kit |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Brian you have done Marge proud and your poem is also an inspirational piece..very well done indeed Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
NICE NICE NICE NICE NICE NICE NICE NICE NICE .... aw I am stuck .... in amazed wonderment ... such a beautiful poem here... lovely... Brian, you just write poetry as if you are getting out the best of the cream from milk... and with great ease at that too... Regards, sudhir. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Mark thank you for your wonderful response. Jeffery, I am shure you have responsed to one or two LOL no seriously thank you for your lovely words. It made perfect sense, to me. Wren, also in a word: THANKS Kit, thanks for your kind words. tracie, thanks is all I say. Sudhir, oh shame on me for making it look easy. Yes I think as of late I seem be making cream. I love the cream metaphor. Thank you my friend for your beautiful words. A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Brian: You have a way with words that is truly breathtaking. This piece is exceptional. I loved it! kat |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
arrgghhhh - avast ye swab, ye be sweeping all the lassies off their pretty feet, ye be. (Leaving no sweeping for the rest of us, I might add). This is great stuuf you've written here. Full of similes that beg to be copied down later and used in my own "original" works - lol. Great writing, Brian |
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