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Bar Scene (or seen at a bar) - another haiku
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Bar Scene (or seen at a bar) - another haiku |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven 
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Bar Scene (or seen at a bar) - Haiku Soft lonely voices eye ladies with flowered drinks flowers to be drank. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
I loved this! I don't really know anything about haiku or what it's all about but I do know that I love this!  kat |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
your really getting in to these Haikus arent you... just love to see a man play with poetry  like this one...its tender and sensual... now write the long and steamy version  LOLlater-haiku-gator jm What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly ~LaoTzeTao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jamie....I agree with Janet, take the idea and run with it |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
true...this is lovely alone, but has endless possibilities....so, stranger, buy me a drink? lol see what I mean? |
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Tanga Junior Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 39BC Canada |
slowly sip the syrup of sweetness .. <**> |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Shaaaaaaaaaaaaaazam! This should be added to the #1 pick-up line book Well done! |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
prometheus~ You really do have a way with words, my friend!!!!! Great Haiku! ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Thanks everyone. These little devils are addictive. And janet.. I don't have the password to the "steamy" forum...lol Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Jamie, Jamie, Jamie, hmmmm I like this one my friend. Well Done Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Wow you can really read alot into these few words...and since the bar scene has been my thing of late it spoke to me in a strange way...sort of made me think.....being single again is tough.....loved the writing...' < !signature-->Julie [This message has been edited by JulieAnn (edited 07-07-2000).] |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Greetings fellow Haikuist... love this artform and always love to see a fellow poet's attempts this one is refreshingly different from the ones i have read so far..."flowers to be drunk"..implying a lot here, are we...Great line there btw Hope to read more of your attempts |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Angel-- I am so glad you enjoyed it- yours are so enjoyable. JulieAnn-- the single life is very hard to adapt to after marriage- glad this one could speak to you. kaile- Yours have inspired me immensely. I will look for more from you! Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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