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Poetry! HA! |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA 
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To write a poem, is my goal. Words to mirror my heart, rhyme to reflect my soul. In this seething quagmire, of poetic abundance, I read works of wonder, and cliched redundance. By what right dare I whine of the skill of Passion's scribes putting their soul in every line. I do not write sonnets, lyrics or bonnets. I know not of iambic pentameter, meter nor even the function of the odometer. I cannot pen works of rythmic muse rhyme scheme, assonace, alliteration, gone from my mind in cosmic obliteration. Nan has tried, through time ad nauseum to teach me use of poetic tool Her efforts while valiant and insightful, have fallen in the seedbed of a fool. Still I wander through this garden sewn with the seeds of poetic bliss this wonderful field of beauty colored with the hue of Passion's kiss, |
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MagnoliaBlue Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 367 |
Very Well Done !  MagnoliaBlue Pay a visit to: http://cyberageadventures.com You will love it! "A poem is just an expression of my life and heart."*CJB* ~*My Skipper Jim, I love you! Your Lady June*~ |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi JP, Well you could of fooled me I think this was wonderful, I too do not know what form of poetry I write in, but I do know it comes from my heart and that is what counts. Love, Cerenity |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
JP, you said "In this seething quagmire, of poetic abundance, I read works of wonder, and cliched redundance." to which I say, "There's poets and poetry, prose and parlays, chitchat and rivalries, redundant cliches.... rhyming and meter and free verse misspelled, misused abundancies, humbled heads swelled... honesty, levity, depth of discourse, wisdom and parady, truths filled with force... but when judging a poet or verse written here, it's not how that we know it but what becomes clear as the soul of the author is clear on display and we hear what he always has wanted to say... But as for me my only criteria is avoiding mass hysteria. If it has a small dash of beloved Ogden Nash or a little echo of a smart Longfellow or, perhaps if I hear just a bit of Shakespeare or a tad e.e. cummings among all these hummings and i'm even ready for L. Fehrlingetti... so read on, my friend and write some too. 'Cause in each and every verse you might find something new. Thank you for letting me share.  sorry to ramble... LOL... what did i say??? hehe loved your last stanza!!! "Still I wander through this garden sewn with the seeds of poetic bliss this wonderful field of beauty colored with the hue of Passion's kiss" delightful! [This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 06-12-2000).] |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Interesting poety as always, JP. I enjoyed this very much. Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
Brilliantly versed. way to jam poetic license in their faces. whoever "they" is... i dig this one a lot. "You are not special. You are not a brilliant and unique snowflake. You are part of the same decaying organic matter as everyone else. We are all part of the same compost heap. We are the all-singing, all-dancing crap of the world." -Tyler Durden "On a long enough timeline, the survival rate for everyone is zero." -Tyler Durden We all got somethin' to atone for. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I like your style..whatever it is!  |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
My style? Kind of a '70s wide collar print shirt and dazed disillusion, with a dash of '80s pennyloafers and 'all about me' attitude, a smidge of '60s jeans, headband rebellion, and a touch of the '90 conservative excess. Mix that all together and sprinkle generously with coffee.... Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP "Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Still I wander through this garden sewn with the seeds of poetic bliss this wonderful field of beauty colored with the hue of Passion's kiss," Well, not only do you have "style" JP ... but you have "class"! I like to think that we can't always follow the rules ... just our pen. Keep writing JP, loved it! Best wishes, /Kit |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Rules, Kit, were made to be broken as they say... I just wish they weren't so often broken over my head!  Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP "Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
So there is hope for me as well, for know not of the many poetic tools you speak. wonderful poem. beautifully said. Still I wander through this garden sewn with the seeds of poetic bliss this wonderful field of beauty colored with the hue of Passion's kiss, "but for the lovers, their arms Round the griefs of the ages, Who pay no praise or wages Nor heed my craft or art" Dylan Thomas. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I think I'm adding this whole thread to my library just to see what garbage I spew, to be wrapped up in the arms of this whole community, to be liked nonetheless... to keep me humbled and honest, to cast not the stone, to not covet any throne... and to not be alone...but knowing I could be, and choosing well. JP, what a blessing you are! Thanks m'friend! and Doreen - your part! What a part! < !signature--> Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 06-27-2000).] |
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