Open Poetry #8 |
Gentle Raven |
Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Sing to me by the light of the moon, gentle raven Rest your wings in my hands so warm and in them find thy haven Thou hast flown long and hard through thy life I offer to thee now a place of respite far from the noise and strife Thine eyes tender bird do indeed hide much Thou hast flown for ages without a kind word or a lover's touch With wings of sable you held your heart Flying, seeking to find that one who can provide the missing part So a welcome gentle raven we give to thy soul Here will your heart be healed your spirit made whole Until the day that you can fly again Toward a life that knows only joy away from your life of pain --------------------------------------------------------------- < !signature--> That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 07-04-2000).] |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Oh how tender this is dear Sven..very softly written..well done Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Hello Shakespeare, well...I mean Sven, how beautiful and hopeful words are, and the flow is perfect. I may be wrong, but, of course your poem is about healing the pain of the raven who is often viewed a dark spirit, but, I feel that the raven is just an image that you choose to replace who you are really speaking of - yourself or a woman you love, whose heart is now becoming dark like that of the raven because of all the pain and loveless times, excellent technique. I loved this! Take care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sven~ What a beauty ! 'With wings of sable you held your heart' Love this thought. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Thank you all. . . Tracie, thank you my friend. . . Marge, thank you as well, I really like that line too!! Melissa, thank you for your words and your insight. . . I know that the raven is mostly seen as negative image, but I have decided to show it here as an image of someone whose life has become dark. . .someone who has suffered much, but because she is a raven (with that negative image) no one will offer her solace. . . the speaker offers her that which she seeks, that which no one else has offered her. . . peace. . . hope. . .love. . . I know that I speak of the raven as "she" but you could reverse the roles also. . . place a male in the raven's role, and a female in the speaker's role. . .the meaning is still the same. . . Thank you all again. . . ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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~Enigma~ Junior Member
since 2000-07-03
Posts 44St Cloud, MN |
Whenever I think of a raven, I think of Poe and his lost love Lenore. You seem to have expanded upon that. Simply beautiful. |
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~Enigma~ Junior Member
since 2000-07-03
Posts 44St Cloud, MN |
Whenever I think of a raven, I think of Poe and his lost love Lenore. You seem to have expanded upon that. Simply beautiful. |
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~Enigma~ Junior Member
since 2000-07-03
Posts 44St Cloud, MN |
And apparently I felt the need to say that twice. *smiles* |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Sven, This is so wonderfully beautiful... Your gift for words and subjects is truly amazing... Regards, sudhir |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
wonderful gentle words Sven, nurturing and loving your just so darn good at making us swoon later-romance-king-gator jm |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
*sigh* *sigh* *sigh* Simply beautiful Sven, this one certainly made this heart swoon I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
There is a wonderful message here I think. Very thought provoking and intriguing. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Thank you all my friends. . . Enigma, thank you, thank you, thank you. . .LOL Sudhir, thank you my friend... Janet, thanks reply-gator. . . I try. . . Isis, thank you my friend. . . Marina, thank you, there is a message here. . . and I'm glad that I could help. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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