Helix - From #1 Somewhat re-worked

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Helix - From #1 Somewhat re-worked

Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

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Purgatorial Incarceration

0 posted 2000-07-03 04:49 AM

Helix

a spiral cone
of silence
threatens to deafen me

all alone,
yet feeling crowded

oppressed
by my very freedom
I decline to choose
as is my choice

blinded by feelings
I may never understand
I see
a whirling pool
of confusion
roiling
beneath my feet

it tries to pull me under
make my control of nothing
whither away
into
the final emptiness
of everything pure

Kit McCallum

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1 posted 2000-07-03 05:13 AM

Wow Christopher! This is so powerful and full of imagery. I thought I could feel the whirlpool below "me"! Excellent writing!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Marge Tindal

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2 posted 2000-07-03 07:36 AM

Christopher~
Wonderfully done, my friend.

'I decline to choose
as is my choice'

Great line !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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serenity blaze
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3 posted 2000-07-04 02:51 PM

Found this way in the back and that just won't do...Back to the top with this...too good to hide...

RainbowGirl
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4 posted 2000-07-09 03:45 PM

Nice to see you didn't disappear completely sweetheart..

HUSG

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5 posted 2000-07-09 10:17 PM

this is a very in depth piece, Christopher, good job.

Kathleen

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