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Your Stare |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston 
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My fingers softly trace your hollowed cheekbones. With gentle hands I smooth back your graying hair. I whisper that it's OK now I'm here with you. But I see no recognition in your stare. I think back to a time when you were full of life. A smile so bright and your laughter like a song. All it took was just a simple twist of fate. And the friend that I had known so long was gone. I talk to you, hoping you'll respond to me. Then pulling the covers smooth around your frame. I look to see if you've heard a word I've said. Knowing if you came back now you wouldn't be the same. I step up to the window staring into space. I think back, when we were young, you and I. All the vows we made and promised we would keep. Swearing we'd be best of friends until we die. I turn and try one final time to break through. Knowing in my heart I've lost my lifelong friend. They pull the plug and then you take one final breath. I watch your weak existance coming to it's end. My fingers softly trace your hollowed cheekbones. With gentle hands I smooth back your graying hair. I whisper that it's OK now I'm here with you. But I see no recognition in your stare. |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This has brought tears to my heart. What a sad story you have brought to rhyme. How beautifully written this is. Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
So sad but true. Very well written! INclan |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Lucie ... the sadness in your words come through so clearly with this loss. You have expressed this so beautifully and lovingly. Well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Lucie! Such pain and sadness portrayed in such loving gentle words. Beautiful! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Painfully affected deep feelings. Very well done! |
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nona Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 139Fla |
Lucie What a beautiful tribute to a beloved friend. Yes there is saddness, but also reassurance that this dear one will live forever in your heart.Beautiful expression of your private feelings......................nona |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, Lucie~ Such sorrow, hon. *HUGS* to comfort are sent your way. I know the sorrow and feel for you. Love you ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
Thank you all for your replies.. It has been many months since I have posted here. Unable to find words in my saddened heart to express the emotions that fill me. I have missed you all very much.. and hope that I again can find my poetic voice. Needing to find friendship here that may at least shadow the one that has been lost to me forever. I pray that you all are well and life has been kind to you. Your words of comfort and kindness make it possible for me to breathe easy.. for this was not an easy poem to write and took me several tries. Still not even echoing the pain that my heart experiences over my loss. Again.. thank you. |
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