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kat
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0 posted 2000-07-02 12:29 PM


In Love With You

The warmth of the sun touching my skin
Is cool compared to what I feel with you
For when you touch me, I melt in your arms
The intensity of your love radiates all the way through

The sound of the breeze, as it passes through the trees
Is harsh when compared to what I hear from you
When you lovingly tell me how much you love me
And your eyes repeat the same words you do

A full moon at night and all the stars in the sky
Don’t do justice to what I see in you
When I look in your eyes, as they sparkle so bright
When I tell you three words,  “I love you”

I’ve given you my body, my heart and my soul
To you my love, I’ve entrusted myself to
I never knew how love could feel
Until the day
I fell in love with you



[This message has been edited by kat (edited 07-03-2000).]

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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2000-07-02 12:38 PM


oh yea..you got it bad ... and its SO GOOD  
excellent writing...
love the use of the nature metaphors,
well expressed emotions
very good work
take care, jm

What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly
~LaoTzeTao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~


Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2000-07-02 02:37 AM


Kat~
I like it when the heart talks ..
delightful.
~*Marge*~


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tracie66
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3 posted 2000-07-02 06:08 AM


Kat~
What a beautiful love poem...well done  
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



ESP
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4 posted 2000-07-02 06:13 AM


Head over heels doesn't come close to what you are going through!!!
Beautiful poem, Kat!!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


"Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

kat
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5 posted 2000-07-02 09:14 PM


Janet, Marge, tracie, Lizzie:  A big thanks to all of you!!

Being in love is the most wonderful feeling in the world. Some of us get lucky enough to find someone that keeps that feeling going forever,  but that is very hard to find.  When we find it, we never want it to end.

Thank-you all again for posting and for all the beautiful compliments.  


kat

SEA
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with you
6 posted 2000-07-02 09:22 PM


Kat~ I agree with Janet, you got it bad and this is so good! Very romantic.   -SEA

Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB



MysticalNights
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7 posted 2000-07-03 12:40 PM


Good work kat..  

A Dream is a Wish the Heart Makes...

Mark Bohannan
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8 posted 2000-07-03 12:45 PM


As they have said. You've got it bad.  So happy to hear someone has found what we all
search and long for.  Wonderful words spoken
from your heart.

angelswing
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9 posted 2000-07-03 12:46 PM


I liked this so much I went to vote for it, and found that it wasn't submitted, please submit it as it is very good and I enjoyed it loads .
L.of.L. Tom .


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ellie LeJeune
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10 posted 2000-07-03 12:52 PM


Kat; This is one of the most romantic and delicious poems! I love it. You are blessed to have found such a love as this. I love the way you have written this with such beauty and grace. Ellie

Summers haunting melody
that awakens
the butterflies,
calling them to join
the dance
in their silent song
of praise to God.

ellie LeJeune


insect
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11 posted 2000-07-03 01:03 PM


Yes kat this poem is very beautiful!
I would vote. If you submitted
this precious piece of love for the
book.

kat
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12 posted 2000-07-03 04:47 PM


SEA: Thank-you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. So you agree with Janet and think I have it bad huh?  

MysticalNights: Thank-you  

Mark: I'm glad you liked it. Thanks! When that special someone comes along and we fall in love, there is nothing that can be compared to that. We crave and want to hold onto that feeling for the rest of our lives.



Tom: I'm delighted that you enjoyed it so much that you wanted to vote for it. I originally wanted to submit it for the book but then something happened. I had trouble posting it. I couldn't the first time I tried. I tried again the second time. It worked but I had forgotten to enter it by that point. I didn't know that I could still do it after I had already posted it without submitting it.  I'm not sure how to. I'll try to submit it if I can find out how to do it. Thanks so much!  

Ellie:  Thanks so much! I'm so happy you loved it!  


Insect: Thank-you so much! I'm so happy that you found it so beautiful. I will try to submit it if I can but as I said in my response to Tom. I'm not sure how to do it right now, after I've posted it already. I'll do my best to find out. When I wrote it I never expected anything like this. Thanks so much for wanting to vote for it.  


kat

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