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Sorry.....Try Again
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Sorry.....Try Again |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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The label on the soda pop Said "You can win a grand!" And I was sure I had the winning Bottle in my hand. I twisted off the bottle cap To get my prize and then I saw the neatly-stenciled message SORRY - TRY AGAIN. So then I bought some Twinkies 'cause The package said that I Could win around 5,000 bucks If I gave it a try. I ate a dozen creme-filled snacks And then another ten But, every time, the package told me SORRY - TRY AGAIN. I got a letter from my buddy - My pal Ed McMahon Who told me, by a stroke of fate, I was a wealthy man! I waited for the mail - spittle Drooling down my chin But, when the letter came, it just said SORRY - TRY AGAIN For months I tried a million things From soda pops to snacks To chewing gum and scratch-off tickets Even crackerjacks! I told my wife, "I'll win some day But I just don't know when. At least I have you!" Then she told me SORRY - TRY AGAIN! So here I sit - I lost it all. I didn't win a cent My fingers sore from twist-off caps And I can't pay the rent. But that's ok. I'll get it back. I'll rise once more and then I'll do what they all told me to... I'll try and try again!  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
ROTFL.... So... Deer... Do you play the lottery??...  Love it, of course.. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Oh Ballader, this one got me to giggle alot How many times we tug at that inner cap To remove the sacred lining to find .. " TRY AGAIN NEXT TIME " I like this one you've shared  Coco |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Who doesn't identify with this? I thought it was great. And you just proved to the world that junkfood can be inspiring.Mike |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
LOL! This is so witty and so true to life. You always write great poems Take care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ I feel so gosh-darn sorry for your lack of luck ... You've just proven to the world it doesn't pay to chase a buck ! If you wanna book a winner take a tip from me ... Remember when life squeezes lemonade You don't get to drink it for FREE ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
This was great!!! LOL Keep on trying I'm sure there's bound to be a time when you'll win something just like I did. Ok ok! So it wasn't a big prize. At least I got another bag of chips. LOL I loved this!!! kat |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
ROFL This was just too funny!!! I think we have all been there and done that!! LOL You have brightened up my day with this one. LW Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. --William Wordsworth |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Now this I can relate to, Balladeer! I've been trying to teach my kids whata ripoff these contests are, tell them all the time and would ya know it, the boy opened up a Snapple and won! Now how do I convince them that was a fluke? Thanks for the smile. Corinne |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
...but you'll always be a winner in my book! Wonderful poem, of course! Denise |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
poor poor 'deer...sigh...you're just never going to learn are you...you get to talk to me! That's all you'll ever need!  K(like it I do...) |
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MagnoliaBlue Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 367 |
LOL This is great! I love your writing! MagnoliaBlue ~My Skipper Jim I love you! Your Lady June~ |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
Balladeer, I like the intro. to this. And the whole thing was spot on. How can I fix my poem, if I have to go looking for all your good work...lol You are inspirational. Linda M. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
ROFL... you crack me up! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
LOL Deer, this is Great!! Loved it. Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
ROTFLMAO!!! This is great, Balladeer!  Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Hehehehehehe....Deer, I'm very sure P.T. Barnum would love to meet the narrator of this poem. Alicat |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Yeah I know the feeling. A winner never quits and a quitter never wins. I find your poetry so heartwarming and fun. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
It reminds me of my mom who buys a few lottery scratch cards every week in the hopes of winning some big money, the most she ever wins in £2. But as they say try again. great poem, next time lucky isn't that what they say. A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
Great story Deer! You always bring a smile to my face Marie~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, Don't want to make you feel worse, but I got four numbers on lotto this week, it paid 82.00 dollars. But your right I'll have to try again. Great poem. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Balladeer, I'm laughing wildly here!!!! By the way, sorry about the pic thing earlier in Marge's poem....I just couldn't resist LOL All my love, Jeffrey |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Loved it sweetheart and the message....but just how many men do I .... hmmmmmmmm ... before I try again?...*g*...sorry, wicked humour this evening.. But you're right, life is one hell of a gamble... HUSG |
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