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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 2000-06-30 06:16 PM


Holographic Fish

Animals from every place
Parading at an animal’s pace
A tall man stands with smiling face
And watches them march into space

And there’s an ancient castle tall
With cut out squares atop the wall
But soon it crumbles down and falls
A fragile castle’s cut out walls

Exotic fish are swimming through
In iridescent shades of blue
Like holographic shining hues
A most exquisite water view

The stage turns gold, but not for long
The animals and fish are gone
But now a maiden dressed in pink
Is bowing to a king, I think

Now she’s a rose in  flower bed
As pink turns to magenta red
And now she’s gone into the blue
The king and castle vanished, too

The sun is fading in the west
I think I watched the very best
A show of clouds went slowly past
As I lay watching in the grass

Elizabeth Santos

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Jamie
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1 posted 2000-06-30 06:27 PM


Almost like watching a short story!
Great Imagery.
jamie

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2 posted 2000-06-30 08:11 PM


Beautiful, Liz! A perfect description of the beautiful images that can be created within one's mind.

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

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3 posted 2000-06-30 08:57 PM


For me it was always dinosaurs. Funny how, as a boy, I would lay in a field of grass watching the clouds and now I lay in a field of grass watching out for insects and checking for snakes...so sad ;(
Martie
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4 posted 2000-06-30 09:03 PM


Lovely vision, Liz...wish I could have seen it!

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5 posted 2000-06-30 10:11 PM


Oh, Lizzie~
One of my favorite pastimes !
I've been known to not only lay in the grass to watch but to pull off the highway and stand in awe at the parade in the sky.

Thanks for posting this delight.
~*Marge*~





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Denise
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6 posted 2000-06-30 10:25 PM


Wow! Beautiful, Elizabeth!  

Denise

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2000-06-30 10:36 PM


Elizabeth,
Something I haven't done in a long time. Enjoyed the read. Love Sy

brian madden
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8 posted 2000-07-01 07:06 AM


Why does this poem remind me of the scene from rumble fish with the fish tank, the whole film is in black and white, the only colour is the fish in the tank. MUst be the vibrant colours in your poem. Anyway ranting here,

Exotic fish are swimming through
In iridescent shades of blue
Like holographic shining hues
A most exquisite water view

The stage turns gold, but not for long
The animals and fish are gone
But now a maiden dressed in pink
Is bowing to a king, I think

Now she’s a rose in  flower bed
As pink turns to magenta red
And now she’s gone into the blue
The king and castle vanished, too

beautifully written Liz, wonderful.

A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

ESP
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Floating gently on a cloud....
9 posted 2000-07-01 07:09 AM


A wonderful poem, describing a wonderful pass time!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


"Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Kit McCallum
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10 posted 2000-07-01 07:10 AM


Excellent Elizabeth!  One of my favorite
pastimes too, though I tend to always see
rabbits, and dogs, and anything furry my mind
dreams up ... loved the sentiments here!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

ethome
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11 posted 2000-07-02 08:05 AM


Beautiful images Elizabeth - what a beautiful time of day!
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