Open Poetry #8 |
Morning |
OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Morning I sit before the mirror, Dead eyes, Morning shadow upon me, Tousled and transfixed, Beside me your bronze body in slumber, Prostrate, inanimate, cold, Sleep severed umbilicus, Waiting for resurrection. Waking you softly, I draw you close, Your warm breath teasing, Playfully blowing in my ear, I pull away preoccupied with me…. Until your force pulls me back, Running your fingers through my hair, Body hot with anticipation. Turning swiftly, I take you, Together in mirrored mimicry, Then sated, I cast you aside… So you can sleep, And I can return to my mask. Olias |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Olias...wow..an excellent poem, really enjoyed this one and I am going to file a copy in my Library. "monuments put from pen to paper turns me into a gutless wonder" Manic street preachers |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Thanks B.M. your words are welcomed and very kind,and I consider it an honour to sit in your library, It was just one of those mornings, Take care Olias |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Well written... enjoyed the read. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
my goodness... such descriptive imagery and unusual vocabulary choices... very cool and unique poem Olias ... a strange mix of sensuality and at the same time frigidity... very interesting view great writing take care, jm What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly ~LaoTzeTao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Olias~ Hot and cold all at once....neat! -SEA Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Thank you everyone for your kind comments, I have a confession to make, I purposly tries to leave this piece open to as much interpretation as possible, but the inspiration was just the act of blow drying my hair. A kind of experiment in making the mundane exciting. Take Care Olias |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Read it thru twice- Once before reading your reply And once after!! Amazing how easy it is to jump to the wrong conclusion. Great writing, Olias. Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Thanks Lizzy, sometimes I can be a devil Take care Olias |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Enjoyed it!!!!! |
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