Teen Poetry #3 |
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CLBinLOVE Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 147Hilton Head, SC, USA |
maybe i shouldnt ask why maybe it would do us good but maybe i need to know why you feel like you are mud i feel like this is tearing us apart ive felt it all along ever since we had our first "talk" about it that thought came into my mind with a bong you say that it seems it seems that i dont care is that good or bad? but to ask i did not dare it could be good you say that u wish people would leave u alone i thought i was doing good by not expressing my inner moans but was it really bad was i one of the few to whom u listened it didnt seem like it sometimes but was i blind to the truth that infront of me glistened? now im not sure whether to act like i care or not i DO care inside but do you need to hear that or not? i have so many questions so much on my mind yet so much i dare not ask for fear of one topic that could break our bind right now it seems that our love is so frail i fear that one topic might break it that one word might make our love de-rail but deep down i know i know that its stronger that to break up we'd need to be fighting for much longer but please remeber this: all im trying to do is help thats all ive ever wanted to do all ive ever wanted to do was love and help im here for you if you want to need me no matter how you treat me just as long as in the end youll still see me i didnt write this in response to isabel galixzea's very good poem, more, i wrote it to my girlfriend, who really liked it in some ways i want her to read it, but im afraid it might start a fight... but anyway, bel, plez know that i did sorta write this after i read your poem (multiple times in fact) but i do not mean to contradict your poem and what it means thanks for reading everbody and the nice replies that i got from all my stuff i feel like thats been too long comming! andas usual, i leave this poem undefended to heavy critisim (i have a feeling ill get it) c yas around! CLB always follow your heart, never follow others unless it is truely where you want to go, and never give up a dream, maybe just set it aside for a while... :) |
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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
This poem says a lot about teenage life doesn't it? The need to fit in and be loved but at the same time the need to be ones true self and an individual. I think you should give this to your girlfriend. No offense but if you two are that weak then you're not in love, if you truly love on another no poem will break you two up. Just my unsolicited advice. Crystal Maybe God has us meet a few wrong people so that when we meet the right one we can truly appreciate the gift. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
CLB~ once again, so honest and so true. Sounds to me like you are having plenty of internal conflicts, First of all, if your relationship isn't open enough to where you can't even find out what you need to do or say or even how she feels, maybe it's not that great of a relationship. I'm not in the position to pass judgement because I have no standpoint in the relationship. But standing on the outside looking in, looks like if your "love" is this fragile, maybe it isn't in fact love at all. I think you just need to sit down and talk to her, find out what's going on show her that YOU CARE. And well, if things don't work out (which I hope they do) then maybe it just wasn't meant to be... Best of luck!!! and if U wanna talk anytime, just e-mail me! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ "Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves." "Bleeding hearts release tears of fire" "work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last" "Shoot for the moon, if you shall fall short, you always have the stars to fall upon" |
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CLBinLOVE Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 147Hilton Head, SC, USA |
hey all, well i know this poem sounds bad, like we arent in love or something like that, thats not exactily the way it was meant to be, in the middle it was supposed to show my fears (that i fear i cant really talk to her sometimes) but i seem to have forgotten to add in that our love IS very strong and when it isnt its a temporary "bump in the road". yes im still gonna keep the name CLBinLOVE because i am still in love. THX FOR CARING EVERYBODY IT MEANS SOOO MUCH!!! every time i have a problem i write a poem about it and post it here and someone always has some nice or helpful words thx alot everybody CLB always follow your heart, never follow others unless it is truely where you want to go, and never give up a dream, maybe just set it aside for a while... :) |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Writing about your problems sure is a good way of dealing with it. I wish I'd done that when I was your age. Liked how you expressed yourself here. |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
you seem to know how to express yourself. which is always good and being a teenager makes it even harder but i think you should let her read it. hope it all works out for you. I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
I LIKED YOUR POEM EXCEPT FOR ONE PART... "BUT DEEP DOWN I KNOW I KNOW THAT ITS STRONGER THAT TO BREAK UP WE'D NEED TO BE FIGHTING FOR MUCH LONGER" IM NOT TRYING TO CRITICIZE YOU BUT WHAT DOES THAT HAVE TO DO WITH BREAKING UP???? PLEASE TELL ME CAUSE I DO NOT UNDERSTAND AT ALL. ARE YOU JUST LOOKING FOR A REASON TO BREAK UP WITH YOUR GIRLFRIEND??? UNLESS ITS JUST THE WAY THAT I AM LOOKING AT YOUR POEM. IT WAS GOOD THOUGH I DONT UNDERSTAND WHY YOU WOULD PUT THAT IN A POEM. ~SOMEONE ONCE SAID~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT~IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WIT |
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CLBinLOVE Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 147Hilton Head, SC, USA |
well that part was meant to mean that what was happening to us wasnt going to break us apart, that if anything could it would have to be something VERY big, if that, but oh well *shrugs* every person takes a poem a different way becuz poems draw on memories and personalities and everybody is different in that area, but enough of me preaching thanks for the reply always follow your heart, never follow others unless it is truely where you want to go, and never give up a dream, maybe just set it aside for a while... :) |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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