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Master
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since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2000-06-18 12:10 PM


“I love you” always sounds so trite!--
I’ve lost my faith while seeking reason!
But then, I saw you there, that night,
Right then I knew, -- my heart’s imprisoned!

What fate could render you such grace?
Your fragrance spreads throughout the hallways!
One day, I’ll talk to you, and dazed,
I’ll say to you, “I’ve loved you always!”


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StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
1 posted 2000-06-19 07:30 PM


Master~definately one of the shorter ones I've seen from you but beautiful nonetheless. I love your work and hope to see more soon!!!!   Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

"Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves."
"Bleeding hearts release tears of fire"
"work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last"
"Shoot for the moon, if you shall fall short, you always have the stars to fall upon"

Novacaine For The Soul
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since 2000-05-26
Posts 122
New Orleans
2 posted 2000-06-19 09:37 PM


dear master,
     this is beautiful... i, for one, hope that you can capture the heart of the one whom you adore even if you are forced to do it with so trite a phrase  

sincerely,
a sad tomato

you're such a beautiful freak... i wish there were more just like you...

Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
3 posted 2000-06-20 01:58 PM


master great work man. but follow your heart its the only thing that guides you so i say go for that love if you feel its right and good luck with it.

I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul



kaile
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since 2000-02-06
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singapore
4 posted 2000-06-20 07:13 PM


wonderful title here....pulls this reader in like a fish to bait, eager to read your poem

Blessed is the soul who can make you utter such a "trite" phrase!

can identify with this piece real well....feel the same sentiments myself....like this poem,master and i do hope i have the opportunity to read more of your work

Master
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since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
Boston, MA
5 posted 2000-06-21 11:48 AM


Thanks everyone!
Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
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Realm of Supernatural
6 posted 2007-11-18 09:41 AM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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