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What a wish can do
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What a wish can do |
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sorrowfulangel Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 59Memphis,TN |
It could be the way you smiled at me that left me speechless all the things I wanted to say safly concealed behinde my lips Maybe it's was that look in your eyes that flooded me with warmth my body whispering the things in my mind I refused to believe Sometimes I think it's how it felt to be near you that destroyed the walls I had built the feelings damned behinde freed to wind through my thoughts Always I fought to ignore it all a friendship I could not stand to loose but now I look upon you holding someone tight and I know wishing will not change the past "god is the biggest under-achiever I know,something good happens god is great,something bad happens,he now works in mysterious ways" |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Hey, great poem. I really liked the way you ended it. It kind of makes people think. Well keep up the good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "True love last forever" |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Very nice poem. Personally, I like the first stanza the most. Good job, keep it up! *~Meredith~* If I were the sun, You would be in shadow And if I had a gun, There'd be no tomorrow *BNL |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
great poem....sorry it didn't work out for you, but to tell you the truth sometimes your own secret wishes really do come true. salooma |
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DJLI Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237TN, USA |
the past sucks. thats all there is to it. but keep your head 'high'  , there's always tomorrow. loved the poem, my Queen. EVEN ANGELS FALL. |
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SweetPoet17 Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 108 |
Loved the poem, remarkable, Kepp the good work up. -jessica- |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
I tend not to reminisce but if that makes you feel better, than thats what you need to do. Anways, great poem, I loved its flow and form. ,._-=-~^* Jeremy *^~-=-_., |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
That really is a great poem. I adore the calm and suttle sadness you portray here....great job. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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