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This Girl |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
I found this girl who Turned my world From night to Day And With every thought Of her i kneel and Pray That she'll chose to stay Forever with me by her Side And it feels werid to say This, this soon But, I'll love her Even after I die. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Sometimes it only takes a moment to fall in love. I really enjoyed reading your poem, the structure was very unique. Keep up the awesome work, my friend! *~Meredith~* If I could read your mind, What would you say? Would it take my breath away? *Human |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
i wish you the best of luck with this girl...sounds like you really like her...good luck... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Hey there, haven't heard from you in a while. Well great poem, I really enjoyed it. I hope everything works the way you want. Just keep your head up. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "True love last forever" |
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mr0001 Junior Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 39 |
this is such a sweet poem...i'm so happy that you have someone in your life who you feel this way about!! love is the greatest high ever!! mr  "crazy" is just who you are...amplified. some people draw the outlines in life, i chose to add the color. |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
Great poem Jeremiah. Nice structure, and a nice flow. Best wishes with this girl. Keep up the good work. Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach. |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
aah, lovely Jeremiah.. ^_^ Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Hey Jeremiah! Haven't seen you post in a while. I want to thank you for getting me started here.... now I'm practically addicted! So who's the chica?? New one? Is she literate? j/k! I know you'll find a great person to be with one day.... best of luck in all you do.... Jenn |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Great to read from you again. I especially liked the end of the poem. Love it seems to trancent all life and time itself. I hope she loves you back. That is my wish for you. good luck Jason  Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear... -Metallica- |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
good work jaybean!! hope the move to sc is ok for you. love ya bro. keep writing yo. kynder Sunshine can not bleach The snow, Nor time unmake what Poets know. Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
thank you all for your replies. but i must let you all know this girl is alot different from all the rest. over the summer i already went to South Carolina and look around and met her and i felt something most people would just throw aside because she got in a car wreck a few months ago and she's in a wheel chair. she will learn how to walk again soon and her name is Alissa. she sooooooooooosooooooooooosoooooooooooo beautiful. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
beautiful, simple, sweet, and truely genuine! good luck with this girl. salooma |
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*ChrisLover* Junior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 46erie, colo |
hey that a great poem!! how old are you? i think tahts really weet to hear that a guy can say or think sweet lik etha t. well i g2g janette |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Very good. You're such a sweetie! Your girl should consider herself lucky. Good luck with her, keep writing Bel |
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Tara Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 76Minnesota |
hey great poem. super sweet. this is one lucky girl for having a guy who can write like this around. can't wait to see more.....Tara |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
You are a much better person than I will ever be. Yes, people are callous and ignorant of what may lie buried beneath the exterior, another human disease. I wish you the best of luck, but in this uncertain world, I can guarantee nothing. ---------------------- Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Hey, man, how's it hangin'? Is this really going on right now or what....if so, good luck. I love the complete contrast in writing you have compared to others...it's nice to see....keep it real man. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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