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what I could ask you
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what I could ask you |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
he promised me a million promises I ate them up and spit them back out soon after I turned my eyes I lost a smile you suffocated an innocent girl in me how many masks can a man wear? how many white lies turned rotten in my palms? I spend hours in a day wishing I could ask you just that |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Very intriguing. I enjoyed it. It kind of left in wonder, but maybe that was just me. Keep up the good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "Always do your best, you will always succeed" |
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Vball Chickie1624 Member
since 2000-05-14
Posts 116New York |
Good poem...I like the way you set it up..it's different. Have fun and keep writing. love ya Danielle  "Dream what you want to dream; go where you want to go; be what you want to be, because you have only one life and one chance to do all the things you |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Very thought-provoking piece, my friend. I love the structure! Keep up the good work! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Hmmmmmmmmm..... Short and straight to the point keep up the good work |
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Snickers Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88East Haddam, CT |
I like it. Very well-done. ~<3 Alwayz~ **Nikki** ~*~*~*~*"We can complain because roses have thorns, or we can rejoice because thorns have roses." *~*~*~*~ |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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