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sorrowfulangel Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 59Memphis,TN |
hidden away within the depths of my mind i struggle to float above my own sea of depression she calls to me her voice an echo of massive tidal waves the waters are rough pulling me farther from a light upon the shore smothered beneath her murky embrace i wish nothing more than to die to cease an ever-lasting battle and let the hungry waters claim it's prize "god is the biggest under-achiever I know,something good happens god is great,something bad happens,he now works in mysterious ways" |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I can feel your powerful emotions in this SorrowfulAngel ... I'm hoping this is just incredible imagery and talented words, and not how truly sad you feel my dear. Please know that there are many here who will lift you up and show you genuine care and love ... you have a beautiful talent that shines through your sad words ... your talent is both your prize and your future. Keep writing ... I will be watching to read more in the future and to see your reply in this thread that you are OK. Best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 07-14-2000).] |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
In the sea of life, I am but a vessel. It is a stately vessel and sea worthy. Please, when you feel the waves crash down on you, simply call, and I will throw you a lifeline. For we have all been shipwrecked. jason |
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DJLI Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237TN, USA |
My Queen, when times are hard, think back to the past, to all the fun you and I and every one else has had with each other, and remember that life is not always hard, it has its shares of fun and love as much as any thing else. Most of all, know that I love you  EVEN ANGELS FALL. |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Marvelously done!!!! The theme, the vocab, the visuality, and creativity were wonderful..again, I've found envy i nthe world of another.. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
I am in awe of you talent...wonderful poem, well done. A friend from primary school, who was a real joker, once said: "Life is like a nikker ball, sweet, but so hard." Once again, a true maste piece this is, hope you find a line to pull you from this ocean of depression. Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach. |
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Kyle aka Huck Member
since 2000-07-16
Posts 63Linn, MO USA |
you have good talent for poetry, this is a good piece  |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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