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Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18
Posts 733


0 posted 2000-07-14 05:32 PM


Hey everyone!  I know it's been sorta a long time since I've posted anything, but I haven't had much time or much to say for that matter.  Well...this one...I don't know what it is really.  I guess it's sorta based on my usual topic...but I'm not really sure.  Well, here it is, feel free to say whatever you want about it. Thanks
Bel

Premonition

It comes to me constantly
No matter day or night
Thriving in the back of my mind
Knowing I think it’s right

Its presence no longer scares me
Like it used to long ago
It’s been with me so long now
Mostly from making myself feel so low

It wakes me from my sleep
As if to remind me
What I am now
And what I want to be

It lives on fear
It lives on trust
It lives on simple truth
That I believe it because I think I must

It may be right
Or it may be wrong
I may be stupid
For believing it for so long

It will not go
Unless I force it to
But is that something
That I want to do

This premonition
Lives inside my mind
And what of this premonition
Am I going to find


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Kittie
Member
since 2000-07-08
Posts 103

1 posted 2000-07-14 05:50 PM


This is wonderful, and the rhyme works great too!  I haven't read your previous work, but it's a great way to come back into the forums!  The ending is wonderful, and I really enjoyed reading it.
Kittie



IsGona
Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723

2 posted 2000-07-14 07:21 PM


Well written.  You really captured the indesision of whether or not to trust your own Premonition.
Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
3 posted 2007-12-01 11:10 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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