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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Like the grass waving in the meadow and trees rustling to and fro. It makes the ocean pound at the shore or open and close a storm door. Like the tornadoes increadible power or the movement of a single flower. One never sees the wind coming. Only its effects are visible. Like love gently moving your soul or the pounding of your heart. Gripped in a tornado of feeling and emotion with the tranquility of an April rose. Like the wind, love is invisible. But you sure know it when it blows. |
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Martini Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
great poem I really enjoyed this one!!  keep it up  |
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Kittie Member
since 2000-07-08
Posts 103 |
Great poem, I really like it and the ending too. Keep up the great work in your writing! Kittie |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
"Like the wind, love is invisible. But you sure know it when it blows" Wise words, my friend, and so beautiful. True, you can never see love coming, you see it's effects on others, but you don't see it... but you feel it. Thank you for sharing this with us. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Lovely_Kris Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176 |
I think this is a great poem. I realy enjoyed it. I also hope to read more of your poems. Keep up the great work. Lovely_Kris [This message has been edited by Lovely_Kris (edited 07-13-2000).] |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
I adore the simplicity, yet loveliness of this poem...it always was one of my favs. The way you clinched it offand the end and brought everything together kicks @$$. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
Wow...this is outstanding, I have a loss of words... ...now that doesn't happen every day Keep it up Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach. |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
You all are too kind. Thank you for your replies. jason  |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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