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BabyGirl1
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since 2000-07-02
Posts 91
Morris, IL

0 posted 2000-07-11 08:44 PM


You said you'd never hurt me
Never cause me any fear
You told me that you'd love me
Till the end of time is near

You said she was a friend of yours
Nothing more and nothing less
You told me not to make a scene
For her life was just a mess

You said you'd never lie to me
Never make me mistrust you
You told me not to make accusations
For she just wanted you too.

You said that you were sorry
never meant for it to occur
You told me that its over now
For it's all just one big blur

You said you want to start over
Never look back at the past
You told me to forget it all
For we could make it last


"We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can fly only by embracing each other."

-Luciano de Crescenzo-

© Copyright 2000 Kristal Plemmons - All Rights Reserved
Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
1 posted 2000-07-12 05:19 AM


This poem brings back some errie memories.  I love the way I almost hear every word you're saying as I read it.  It's something bout the way you write that does it...give Thomas a kiss for me.

Jeremy

"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
2 posted 2000-07-12 06:58 AM


Very nicely written BabyGirl!  Oh, it brings back so many memories ... you've expressed yourself well. I do hope you'll find someone new to ease the heartache in time.  

Best wishes,
/Kit

TAP2
Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211
Morris, Il USA
3 posted 2000-07-12 09:54 AM


Heart-wrenching, and guilt inflicting, this is a very personal piece. I'm glad you can express it finally. I love you, and you know I'll never hurt you.

Love alwayz,
Thomas

"I could have missed the pain
But I'd of had to miss The Dance"

-Garth Brooks-

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
4 posted 2000-07-12 02:48 PM


this is a beautiful poem...i think that we all have been through this stage in our life...you write beautifully...and you have my vote...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

essenceofangels
Junior Member
since 2000-07-12
Posts 36

5 posted 2000-07-12 02:53 PM


Wow!Very well written I must say!!
Magnificent my dear can wait to see more!

                   Love,
                      Essenceofangels


"Look back on time with kindly eyes"
"A word is dead
When it is said,
Some say.
I say it just
Begins to live
That day."


LoveBug
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6 posted 2000-07-12 09:08 PM


This is a wonderfully-written poem, but so sad. It's hard when a relationship ends, but you just have to pick up the pieces and move on. I wish you the best of luck!

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

Jacman
Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291
Dwight Il, US
7 posted 2000-07-13 11:31 AM


I don't really know what to say, because I always seem to say the wrong thing.  but Thomas' cowboy icon looks like mancow.  luv ya lots babygirl.

jason

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
8 posted 2007-12-01 11:04 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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