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Teen Poetry #3

Confused heart

Tamma

Senior Member

since 2000-01-17

Posts 794
In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV

0 posted 2000-06-14 10:51 AM

I’ve known you for a while now,
And I've always liked you.

I jut told you last week,
Just what was in my heart.

I'm still full of questions,
And now finding answers.

In the midst of all of this,
My heart is losing its mind.

Now through all of this confusion,
I just want your arms around me.

(if ya ever wanna chat, you can IM me on AOL: sexikitticat -or- Poetic Bliss 82)

Snickers
Member

since 2000-05-25

Posts 88
East Haddam, CT

1 posted 2000-06-14 11:40 AM

I like it, but I think you could add a little more elaboration. Let us feel your pain. Don't think I'm insulting your work because I'm not, it's beautiful. I just think that with a little more work it could be even more beautiful.

I also really like the concept of your heart losing it's mind.

~<3 Alwayz~
**Nikki**

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