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Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08

Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

0 posted 2000-07-09 11:53 PM

I know this girl with
A sugar to sweet
She'll love you one minute
And rip your heart out
The next beat.

This girl plays games
Like she is the master
every move you make
She makes a counter move
Much faster.

If you try to get close
She'll let you for a day
But be warned the next day
It's not with you she'll stay

I know this girl with
A sugar to sweet
And if i find another
Like her i'll be sure
To run with both my feet.

Reply: this kind of has no point in my life at this time it was written as a continue to my poem "the one i can't forget". so i hope you enjoyed.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-

LoveBug

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since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

1 posted 2000-07-10 12:35 PM

This is a very well-written poem. I'm so glad that this doesn't apply to you, it really hurts to have someone disregard you like that. I hope you never come in contact with "sugar too sweet".

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

Erin
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since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

2 posted 2000-07-10 01:16 AM

Jeremiah~~~its about time that you started posting more poems up in here...havent heard from you in awhile...this is a good poem...and im glad that this isnt a personal experience...but you know that there are girls out there like this...keep up the good work...ill be looking for more from you...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

April Resi
Member

since 1999-10-18

Posts 119
Alabama

3 posted 2000-07-10 01:52 AM

I liked the style of this one. I'm glad you have not had to deal with a person like this. There are plenty of people around like that. I hope you never have to deal with that, because it hurts so much to just be ignored like that. Anyway, I liked the poem!
April

Jacman
Member

since 2000-06-27

Posts 291
Dwight Il, US

4 posted 2000-07-10 09:22 AM

Ahh, I have many times dealt with that sugar that was so sweet for an instant, then it turned into the flesh decaying matter that it is. Well done, I'm looking for more. And I especially like the last line about running with both feet because I imagine that you would look kind of dumb trying to do it with only one.LoL

jason

[This message has been edited by Jacman (edited 07-10-2000).]

Chel
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA

5 posted 2000-07-10 10:22 AM

This was very well written, and I hope that you keep this up. I hope this never happens to you, but it happens to everyone at least once. Keep up the good work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"Always do your best, you will always succeed"

BabyGirl1
Member

since 2000-07-02

Posts 91
Morris, IL

6 posted 2000-07-11 05:00 PM

This was a wonderful poem, as always! I am glad to hear that this has never happened to you. Good luck on all of you novels and poetry.

DJLI
Member

since 2000-06-21

Posts 237
TN, USA

7 posted 2000-07-11 06:09 PM

as always, beautiful.

EVEN ANGELS FALL.

EroseGrover
Junior Member

since 2000-07-09

Posts 44
SD,CA 92126

8 posted 2000-07-11 06:28 PM

One word comes to mind "Magnificent"

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

9 posted 2007-12-01 10:57 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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