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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
She awakes Puts on her mask Hiding what lies beneath Showing forth To the world Her fictitious personality Angelic to The naked eye She goes throughout her day Friends she knows She cannot trust Without the mask what would they say Her pen Her only outlet She shares now and then The thoughts she hides Behind the mask That some might consider sin Bitter words Of anger and love She lets the chosen see But behind the mask She alwayz hides Her true personality --Thomas A. Plemmons |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Thomas, I really enjoyed this poem. It reminded me of a friend that does that. I wish she would just have some confidence, but maybe as time goes by. Keep up the good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "Always do your best, you will always succeed" |
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buttercup411 Junior Member
since 2000-07-03
Posts 41miami, fl, u.s |
that's a nice poem....i had a time in my fist year of highschool where i never was myself and that poem reminded me of that...i still do that at times.. |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
I have been thinking, just a ew days ago, to write something similar, to perhaps make some people see what they can't, but I decided not to, cause that would expose me too much. It was the same when my parents first found out about my writing poems, suddenly, where it once was so personal, everybody knows, and I don' like that...but any way... This is a great poem, keep up the good stuff Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach. |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Way to go Tommy Boy, you got my vote again.  jason |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
this is a good poem...but we all have a mask that covers up the real us...i know that i do...and i know alot of people that do to...its just something that we go through in life...keep up the good work...you have my vote... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a wonderful piece. We all have a mask that we hide behind... very few people will find the courage to take it off and show people who they really are. I hope you are one of these people. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Oh Thomas, we all hide behind a mask of safety. It is the only way to ensure that people won't think bad of us. I suppose we all are guilty of this, that's just how it is, but I don't think that hiding all the time is such an ok thing. It should be something used cautiously, hopefully whomever this poem is about will learn what it is to show people the real you, bad thoughts or not.  keep it up, once again you have my vote  Love Always~*~Jessica~*~~*~My fire is dead,it knew no pain; yet it is dead and I remain: All stiff with ice ashes lie;and they are dead, and I will die~*~ |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
now this is my fav so far. i enjoyed this one alot and hope you keep them coming like this one. wonderful wonderful I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Well, that certain someone in this forum kinda got the message, but not entirely I guess...she dies her hair blonde, I guess that explains it. Well, I feel like crap right now, so I'll just end my little note thingy now...later. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Ok. so I feel pretty stupid right now!!! oh dear, guess I didn't really think that much about it. I'm really sorry Thomas! I'm really touched though about the whole thing! I feel special now! oh yeah and tell Jeremy to shut up! Just cuz I'm blonde doesn't mean I'm stupid--It's just my excuse for being dumb and not getting things sometimes! thanks guys I love you!! I don't know what I would do with out you! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ aka:Pryncess Jess!! ~*~My fire is dead,it knew no pain; yet it is dead and I remain: All stiff with ice ashes lie;and they are dead, and I will die~*~ |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
i just wrote a poem with the same title. i guess i'll have to wait a while to post. very well penned. i liked these parts. -------------- Friends she knows She cannot trust Without the mask what would they say --- The thoughts she hides Behind the mask That some might consider sin -------------- again, well done. it conveys its message very well. We all got our demons. We all got somethin' to atone for. |
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FlipAngel Junior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 46Prior Lake, MN, USA |
Excellent work, I have certainly developed into quite a fan of your work! "The Mask" reminds me of the little girl inside myself, too. ~*Yesterday is gone, let go of the past; tommorrow will bring new hope to grasp*~ |
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Linzi Junior Member
since 2000-07-08
Posts 35Pennsylvania, USA |
Wow, I can definitely see myself in this poem! It's wonderfully written and expressed, and I understand it fully! ~*~Linzi~*~ "Ignore reality; there's nothing you can do about it" ~ Natalie Imbruglia |
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BabyGirl1 Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 91Morris, IL |
This is a beautiful poem. Everyone has a mask that they hide behind at some time or another. Keep up the good work! Love always BabyGirl1 "We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can fly only by embracing each other." -Luciano de Crescenzo- |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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