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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
I had a heart of love Now its broken I cried a river You turned away I was broken You said you cared Now you don't You broke my heart And turned away I couldn't believe it But it was true What should I do? I looked to you for answers You turned me away I was broken "True friends stab you in the front" "Always do your best, you will always succeed" |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Well, first I must say...whoever did that to you can kiss this entire forums collective @$$!!!!! Anywhoo, the poem was rather simple, but I liked it that way. The feeling of heartache can sometimes be muddled with too much addatives...nice job. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Chel, Once again marvelous job in a very simplistic manner. But like a bird with a broken wing, time can mend all things and we will soar once again. Thomas |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
So few words, and so many deep emotions Chel! A lovely heartfelt verse!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
This was a great poem. I hope that this hasn't happened to you, and that it won't happen ever. |
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buttercup411 Junior Member
since 2000-07-03
Posts 41miami, fl, u.s |
god guys can be such dummies(to avoid profanity) but great way of expressing how you feel ....loved simple but juicy.. keep your head up... love butter |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Chel I'm sorry you have to go through this pain. I know how you feel. You just have to be patient and wait for the person to come along that knows how to fix you. Happy hunting. jason |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Thank you all for your support. I am so lucky to have friends like you. I don't want to you get all caught up in my poems. I just want you all to keep up the good work on your own poems. Take care and keep your heads up. ~luv always, Chel~ "True friends stab you in the front" "Always do your best, you will always succeed" |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
This is a lovely poem, it is simple, but expresses your emotions so well. Hang in there. Keep up to good writing. Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach. |
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**AANGELLE** Junior Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 45 |
I'm sorry to hear that you felt that way. I hope you will be feeling "fixed" soon. This is a great poemm - simple and true. Keep up the great writing Chel!! AAngelle P.S. Chocolate helps!!! |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
well what can i say...guys just dont mix well with girls but we got to love them...this is a good poem chel...and whoever this guy is...isnt worth your time or tears...keep your head up... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Wicced_Witch Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 110Clarksville, TN, USA |
Great poem, simple, but gives off alot of emotion. As for the guy, he wasn't worth your time. One day you will find the right guy for you and not worry about him breaking your heart... Steph |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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