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Open our eyes. |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa 
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Clouds like long fingers reaching from the pale sky, asking for help, hopelessly they try. I look to the sun, thin slice of cucumber she is, her light has burnt out, no warmth or comfort she gives. The ocean cries out, it falls on deafened ears. Silence is the only answer with fright she hears. Keep holding on, your head proud and high, help is on the way, soon they’ll hear your cry. Fueled by selfishness, blinded by greed, we wounded them all, to death they will bleed. We should stop one moment and open our eyes and see what we’ve done, the cure within us lies. |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
I thought this poem was very well written. Keep up the good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "Always do your best, you will always succeed" |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
this is a good poem...the way you expressed how we should open up and look at things...but everyone is greedy and selfish...who knows why but god made us like this...but honestly if people dont love us for who we are not what weve done there would be a world filled with hate... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
I really love the imagery and flow to this poem. You have my vote. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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