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The hurricane, the ocean, and you
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The hurricane, the ocean, and you |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
The world is an ocean. Although it has its beautiful beaches, its island paradises and breathtaking coral reefs, This ocean is for the most part, enveloped in an angry and furious storm. Black skies, Unimaginably tall, furious white waves, rushing towards you, fully intending for one to drown. When you fall into the sea, you find that it is infested with large carnivorous sharks. They seek to devour you limb by limb, nourishing themselves with your flesh and your blood. Your love then, is a boat, strong and sturdy, that never sinks, no matter how tall the waves, and never wavers, no matter how ferocious the sharks It is because of your love that I persevere. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful comparisons Jose! This brought both terrifying and comforting images so vividly to mind ... enjoyed this! Best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 07-07-2000).] |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Great analogies...great visual depiction also. You've got some game, man...keep it up. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
I really liked this poem. I hope you keep this up. I see that you are a very good writer don't give up. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "Always do your best, you will always succeed" |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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