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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania 
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Okay, at the end of this month I'm going to the state pageant and this is my talent  . I know it needs A LOT of work and any help would be greatly appreciated. Thanks!Someday the trophies will all be packed away The roses will wilt, but memories will stay The gowns will be packed in a closet somewhere Age will set in, graying our once vibrant hair We will tell our children and grandchildren too Of each of our experiences brand new How the girls came, from all over our great state And of excitement, not one of us could wait So different, yet there was one thing we shared We got up on that stage, and our souls were beared As nervous as could be, but we were prepared Thanks to all the people who showed us they cared Helping us prepare and calming our stage fright Hours of practice leading up to one night And when the lucky girls that win are called out I'll know that each girl has won, without a doubt We gave it our all and each challenge was met None of us have a reason to be upset Instead, we should be proud of all that we've done Since this isn't based on winning, but having fun When you tell tales of this pageant in old age You won't remember the winner on the stage But you'll remember the practice it gave you Thanks to those at Coed Pageants who make dreams come true ~Susie P.S. I was in the challenge forum and found PdV square dance challenge and think it sounds pretty cool. Anyone want to be my partner for a collective poem? "Do you love me because I am beautiful, or am I beautiful because you love me?" ~Cinderella |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I think this is wonderful Angel! You captured the preparation, the anticipation, the climax and excitement of the evening, and wrapped it all up with a lovely closing sentiment. Well done and have a terrific time! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Hey there, I enjoyed this poem it was just like a story but it was real. Good luck and keep up the good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Kit~ Thanks so much . It was kind of tough since I didn't go yet. By they way, congratulations on your new moderating position, I'm sure you'll do a wonderful job  !Chel~ Thanks a lot . I'm really glad you liked it. Can't wait to read some of your stuff.~Susie "Do you love me because I am beautiful, or am I beautiful because you love me?" ~Cinderella |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
well angel i havent read alot of your work but this one is really good...you must put alot of hard work into your pagents...i had a friend who was an irish dancer and seeing how hard that was is a suprise...i can just imagine how hard it is for you...GOOD LUCK at the state pagent... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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