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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
I love to think about you When my day is down When soul has burned and shot and dragged to the gutter… Then I start to dream. Maybe I'll never have you, But the thought of you, and your kiss puts my soul at rest, In bliss |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
WoW, awesome poem! I'm impressed. Very heart-felt. *~Meredith~* I am none but the angel Who sings you to sleep As you pray to God Your soul to keep *Me |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
This is a woderful poem and it depicts your true feelings about this person very very well. I'm glad you have such a person in your life, and don't look at the side of not "having" them because you will never know if you don't at least give it a try. Keep up the faith and best of luck to you my friend, Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~ ~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
well i agree with what jessica says...you shouldnt give up if you havent even tried...maybe this girl feels the same way about you that you feel about her...but you dont know how she feels...this is a good poem...i really like it... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Welcome to Passions! This is a wonderful poem... dreams are enough to comfort the soul, I know. Nothing like the reality would be, but it's better than nothing. I can relate to this very well. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
I love poems about dreams. Every depiction of thier wonder captivates me. This one included. Keep it up. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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AndrewDL Junior Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 24California |
Great work, its short length really makes it effective. I liked the way you added a couple of lines conveying some of your hopelessness, it gives the poem added depth. Great work. -Andrew Trust too much, and you may be deceived, but trust too little and you will live in torment forever. |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Hey sweetheart, I loved this poem very much. I love you too. I hope that you keep this up. You are a good writer and I hope that never loose this quality. Luv always, Michelle "True friends stab you in the front" |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
i loved this poem alot and hope to see more from you like this one. so do keep it up and your dreams alive. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Candy Junior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 17 |
i cant really say ive done this alot. but i finally got my dream to come true. good luck to you! Candy |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
Thnaks guys! I'm glad you liked my poem. I was afraid it might be to strong, |
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The_Driven Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 60 |
This really is a nice poem, that depicts very well, how you feel about this person. Keep up the good poetry. This was very well done. |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
short and sweet-I love this. you gotta have faith and dreams or the world will eat you up. good poem! "We have all these galaxies inside of us. And if we don't enter those in art, then I don't understand the point in doing anything."-Sam Shepard |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
Where did this come from. this was one of my first posts here!! I can't believe it! thanx for bringing this one back |
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JR Junior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 22morris il |
hey grat job on that poem. It was creative and cute at the same time 2 qualities most people have to work at , but they come naturally to you. Keep up the writing. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Wow, this is so cool. It brought wonderful thoughts into my head, you did a great job with it  |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
VEry nice Jose.....great sentiments you've put in this. I love your poetic style, it's beautiful! Salooma |
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Lovely_Kris Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176 |
wounderful poem I think you did a great job! Keep up the great work and hope to read more. Lovely_Kris [This message has been edited by Lovely_Kris (edited 08-21-2000).] |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
thanks guys for reading my poem, Driven~ thanks a bunch for digging this poem up. It made me realize how much i've posted in the month and a half that I've been here. |
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