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Virgil
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since 2000-12-29
Posts 43
Toronto, Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2001-01-09 09:29 PM


Fate of Humanity

Existing somewhere, 'twixt sleep and reality,
Standing, and seen through half-opened eyes;
Poised in the door, amid lintel and floor,
Showing no remorse nor surprise.

Swiftly moving, sliding or hovering,
Without feet at all to touch bottom;
Traveling aloft, with garments so soft,
Yet hopeless to humanly touch him.

Closer and closer, coming en route,
His plans laid clearly before him;
Plans to be, or plans for me?
Plans which, at this moment, begin.

Eyes now closed, he cannot be sensed,
How ironic, now all can I see!
A touch of his palm, problems are gone...
As my soul departs from its body.

© Copyright 2001 Joe Longpre - All Rights Reserved
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
1 posted 2001-01-09 10:02 PM


Wow this was a nice description of what was going on with this one guy. I liked it.......geesh, this was nice.


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Melster
Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442
Brisbane, Qld, Australia
2 posted 2001-01-10 05:27 AM


Great job.. very descriptive and yeah well what else can I say...  Good Work!!

Melz!!

Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
3 posted 2001-01-11 01:04 PM


This is written very well!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
http://www.thehungersite.com

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