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Stomach Ulcer |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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Stomach Ulcer: Twisting, turning. The pain shrouds my mind. Bubbling, burning. The pain that is mine. Crying, moaning. If only this would end. Sobbing, groaning. To stop it, it must mend. Biting, chewing. The cause of this day. Puking, spewing. To puke is the way.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Nice job! You described this so I pray I will never have one! Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
To puke is the way... in other words to reject or remove something from yourself is to solve the problem... Good message herein, if I am correct. Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
i loved the topic it was quite intriguing i believe allan has a good interpretation... great post, i enjoyed reading it ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
A good piece, with some wonderful insight from those who have replied. If this is to be taken literally, know that I've been through all that... Thanks for sharing. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I would have never noticed what Allan said if he wouldn't have said it. It makes sense, is that what you were going for? ...Lakewalker reminds himself to think just a little more deeply... Nice job on this one. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
It was good, i could feel the stomach ulcer. but ill agree with Allan, since he is the best with the interpattion of poems.. Regina |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
*blush Aw, shucks Regina... and you just met me too! Anyway, if you knew me you would know that I am not good at all with interperetations, usually. I got lucky here. |
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Virgil Junior Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 43Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
I agree with everyone...that's it! Good job! "By other ways, by other ferries, not here, shalt thou pass over: a lighter boat must carry thee." "I AM CANADIAN!!" |
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