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peanogrl83
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since 1999-12-04

Posts 202

0 posted 2001-01-09 12:08 PM

This shall be my last post for a great deal of time..probably until next summer.  Sorry to have put you through all the bad poetry, but relief is finally in sight. Last time you have to deal my crap for a loonnngg time! :.)
Vreni
p.s. I'm having some trouble w/ the format working here...sorry!

A Life's Story

Lucid liquid runs off course,
           o
           w
           l
           y earning squelches source.
Rancid rancor of burning flesh,
              i
              n
              s
              e
              d own with fancy fresh.
Squalid shame of scampered leaf,
               e
               n
               t o hell without a grief.
Candor crowds the fallen sheep,
               o
               w
               a
               r
               d
               s teal its soul to keep.
Fickle fruits the trees do bear,
            r
            i
            g
            h
            t
            e
            n
            e
            d onor unaware.
Insipid ice of dissidence,
             d
             l
             e pic of fallen prince.

[This message has been edited by peanogrl83 (edited 01-09-2001).]

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-01-09 12:45 PM

Incredible... this is, without a doubt, the most interesting poem that I have seen in Passions since I arrived. The messages seem to be more than one, and spread widely. The poem format is brilliant.
Great crap as usual, Vreni.

Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy.

Stephanya
Member

since 2000-11-03

Posts 63
Berkshire County~USA~

2 posted 2001-01-09 02:14 AM

Wow, huh?! Quite an imagination you have there to make this poem bloom. Good job!

(:***stephani***:)
"A true friend will always stay a friend
whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end."

..

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

3 posted 2001-01-09 05:06 AM

Oh Vreni..till next summer?? Dammit!!

This is terrific. The format actually brings more life to it. I like it written this way. The messages set here are interesting. It made me think quite a bit. Great work as usual.

~AF~< !signature-->

"Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement."
Christopher Fry

[This message has been edited by anonymousfemale (edited 01-09-2001).]

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2001-01-09 09:28 AM

Dang Vreni....I'm lost here
explanation please

and what is this thing about your last poem
i don't think so
i'm gonna come to New York and drag you back in Passions

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

IsGona
Senior Member

since 2000-07-14

Posts 723

5 posted 2001-01-09 12:40 PM

This is a very interesting style.. Very creative.
Sorry to hear you will not be posting, but I understand. You'll be missed.
~Jason

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-01-09 01:10 PM

This was awesome Vreni. I know yer not coming back for a while.....so i'm glad I can at least see you on AIM. Hope to see you posting soon love.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

jeremydraul
Senior Member

since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

7 posted 2001-01-09 03:33 PM

first off I truely enjoyed your wondrous poems of intellect and amusing words...
you often left me puzzled and intrigued...thanks for the posts...
hope to hear from you soon again!
~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

8 posted 2001-01-09 08:12 PM

I am sorry that you do not believe in the true talent that you have. Your fantastic poems will truly be missed, I can't wait for your return.

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
http://www.thehungersite.com

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

9 posted 2001-01-09 08:15 PM

It's not that Vreni doesn't see the talent, rather it is because self-bashing brings out the best praise, always. ~_^
If I weren't so perfect, I might try it myself.

[This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 01-09-2001).]

Wicced_Witch
Member

since 2000-02-06

Posts 110
Clarksville, TN, USA

10 posted 2001-01-09 09:29 PM

This has to be one of the most interesting poems I have ever read. I liked the format. Too bad I won't get to read any thing of yours for a while. This was great.

Steff.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

11 posted 2001-01-10 01:16 PM

Actually Allan, Vreni doesn't try to get praise. It's not why she does it. She does it because she truly doesn't see the potencial of her work. Now, I agree with all of you on the fact that her work is amazing, but her self-bashing is all a part of what a lot of poets do, including myself. I dislike my work. Why? Well because I know how better I can be, I compare myself to the GREAT POETS. Compared to them, we are all nothing. Once a poet says he's good and can get no better, he's lost. Vreni keeps the humility within poetry alive.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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