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CareBear3 Junior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 39New Hampshire |
Sorry, kind of confusing with lots of thoughts but a general theme. So close and yet so far away. So open and yet so shut to off to me. So similar your touch, so distant your voice. So close your hand and yet so far your mind. So willing to speak and yet not speaking to me. So warm to hold, and yet not your mind. So near your body and yet your thoughts so distant. So energetic and talkative and yet nothing comes out. So comfortable you are and yet who is it you are? I look at you and you stare back, not a reflective image of what it is I can not do, but what it is I succeed in. A memory of all good things gone bad but of all the silver linings. A vision of what has been and what has the possibility of being. A door locked but I can open. A door locked but you can open. A door locked but not really locked at all. A door locked only for those too impatient to wait for it to revolve. A door locked only for those who are too busy to read the sign. A door locked only to those who don’t take time to care. A door locked only to those who themselves have locked their doors. "In great moments life seems neither right nor wrong but something greater it seems inevitable" ~Kelley |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
CareBear: I am surprised that no one had replied to this piece by now. I found it really deep and quite interesting. Your opening line just hit me. Maybe it is because I can actually feel what you are going through. These mixed thoughts are good. Rather expressive and the style in which the poem was written suits it. The last section about the doors being locked was great. In this bit it describes, to me, all of society. Everybody has a something locked away. Great piece of writing.  ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was a wonderful piece carebear. I truly enjoyed this read due to the truth revolving around it. Wonderful thoughts.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Truly awesome, this poem is. Something completely different and new, without definite format, but still nicely written. I have trouble writing with an uneven format, but you did so very nicely. High praise indeed, this is one of the best poems that I have read since I arrived here. Best of luck, keep writing and posting. Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Hey, This is such a good poem, I like how it's written, great work! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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