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American Beauty |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
American Beauty, No papers can cast that. No Mississippi will turn my brown eyes blue. No Golden State can make my hair of bronze. And is that what I want? American Beauty, My country's wealth cannot compare, Nor freedom from it ring. Yet in its substance lies, People of purest kin. American Beauty, Vote, no right of mine, In the land of my birth. The president is our president. The king is our king. American Beauty, Rough wounds I find from your warmth, Nonesense floods your empty streets. What point is there in your freedom, When monsters, it's created of all. American Beauty, Just are you America? Are you as fair as your rights? For I, I've seen your worst. True hatred of colors you've cursed. American Beauty, Do live with all that might, Let God shed more grace on thee. But as long as I survive. American I can never be. *I hope this didn't offend anyone, this is just how I feel  [This message has been edited by Ron (06-25-2011 10:03 AM).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I'm with you 100%! I understand what you're saying completely. Seeing as how I am Puerto Rican, I am faced with constant redicule from certain American individuals. I know how it feels to be looked down upon. But I know your poem isn't really about that. It's about a sense of knowing WHO you are, and you are truly not an American. Well that's what I got from it anyway......yea.....ok bye!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
hey salm! nice to see another post... this poem really shows your true colors the details you've provided were wonderful! im not offended, but inspired! best wishes n' keep in touch, ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think the way this is written is very good, it gets your point across. Great writing and it's good to see you posting again! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Salma~ Girl its so good to see you back and with an amazing poem. This is a side of you I have never seen. Girl let out what you are feeling. Let the world know what is going on in your head and how you feel. And I dont think that you will be offending anyone at all. This is about you and your feelings. Keep up the good work girl!!! People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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